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    • Working part time after school

    • Students need to have worked part time with experiencing economic crisis, especially in Turkey, in the world so far.
  • Parents don’t want their children to work part time jobs after school because they believe students need to concentrate only on their education.
    • While some students think like this opinion, others want to stand on their own two feet because they will live on their own in the future.
  • Working part time after school has both advantages and disadvantages.
    • The main advantage is that students stand on their own feet while its disadvantages are fatigue and jealousy of other friends’ lives.
    • First of all, students stand on their own feet thanks to working part time after school.
    • Some students don’t want to push their parents in terms of economical and thus they would like to work part time jobs after school even if they are very tired.
  • When they grow up, they become responsible for everything, which creates a sensible public.
    • On the other hand, students who work part time jobs after school are very fatigued.
    • Students are very tired when they come home, both studying for their exams and working part-time jobs.
    • Prominent researchers engaging in long and careful consideration tell us that students who work part time jobs generally fail because it takes a lot of patience to achieve this.
    • In addition to fatigue, students working part time jobs are very jealous of their friends because when they work part time, their friends will enjoy life.
  • Therefore, students working part time ignore them and should learn about life’s difficulties.
  • Otherwise, they will continue to work unwillingly, which leads to an unhappy life.
    • To sum up, working part time after school has some advantages and disadvantages.
  • While students stand on their own feet due to part time jobs, they are very fatigued and jealous of their friends.
    • I think working part time after school is a very good process in our life.

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    • Students need to have worked part time with experiencing economic crisis, especially in Turkey, in the world so far.
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    • Students need to have worked part time with experiencing economic crisis, especially in Turkey, in the world so far.

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    • Parents don’t want their children to work part time jobs after school because they believe students need to concentrate only on their education.
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    • While some students think like this opinion, others want to stand on their own two feet because they will live on their own in the future.
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    • While some students think like this opinionagree with this thinking, others want to stand on their own two feet because they will have to live on their own in the future.
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    • The main advantage is that students stand on their own feet while its disadvantages are fatigue and jealousy of other friends’ lives.
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    • The main advantage is that students stand on their own feet while itsgain independence; the main disadvantages are fatigue and jealousy of otheir friends’ lives.
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    • Some students don’t want to push their parents in terms of economical and thus they would like to work part time jobs after school even if they are very tired.
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    • Some students who don’t want to push their parents in terms of economical and thus they would like tobe a financial burden on their parents work part time jobs after school even if they are very tired.
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    • Students are very tired when they come home, both studying for their exams and working part-time jobs.
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    • Students are very tired when they come home, bothAfter studying for their exams and working part-time jobs, students return home very tired.
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    • Prominent researchers engaging in long and careful consideration tell us that students who work part time jobs generally fail because it takes a lot of patience to achieve this.
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    • Prominent researchers engaging in long and careful consideration tell uThe findings of rigorous research suggests that students who work part time jobs generally fail because it takes a lot of patience to achieve thisfor lack of patience.
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    • In addition to fatigue, students working part time jobs are very jealous of their friends because when they work part time, their friends will enjoy life.
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    • In addition to fatigue, students who working part time jobs are very jealous of their friends because whilen they're work part time,ing their friends willare enjoy lifeing themselves.
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    • While students stand on their own feet due to part time jobs, they are very fatigued and jealous of their friends.
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