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  • My essay about technological advance)

  • People live in the 21 century, when technological advances have been developing very fast.
    • A number of discrepancies are between adherents of progress and people who claim IT-progress can lead to dangerous consequences.
    • Is it worth to continue using products of the technological advance?
    • In my opinion, technological advance helps us a lot.
    • For example, the Internet opens the gate of the universe of knowledge for pupils and students, for adults it allows learn news about politics and economics.
    • Not only the Internet, but also other breakthroughs of the technological advances play a significant role in our life.
  • A great number of people cannot imagine their lives without PCs, microwave ovens, vacuum cleaners, cars and so on.
    • What is more, but for diverse websites we are able to make the acquaintance with people around the world.
  • Nevertheless, consider the problem from another side.
  • People have been becoming lazy and weak because of using new technologies.
    • They lost a view about the real life, being absorbed into the virtual world.
    • Moreover, we could develop our capabilities if the Internet has not been a kind of addiction.
    • I cannot agree with these points of views because I believe people are not so silly that to spend all life in front of the screens of computers.
    • To conclude, I would point out people should keep up with time, but do it wisely.

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    • A number of discrepancies are between adherents of progress and people who claim IT-progress can lead to dangerous consequences.
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    • A number of discrepancies areexist between adherents of progress and people who claim IT-progress can lead to dangerous consequences.
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    • Is it worth to continue using products of the technological advance?
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    • Is it worth it to continue using products of thtechnologically advanced products?¶or¶Is it worth continuing to use technologically advanced products?
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    • For example, the Internet opens the gate of the universe of knowledge for pupils and students, for adults it allows learn news about politics and economics.
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    • For example, the Internet opens the gate tof the universe of knowledge for pupils and students, for adults it allows and it allows adults to learn news about politics and economics.
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    • Not only the Internet, but also other breakthroughs of the technological advances play a significant role in our life.
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    • Not only the Internet, but also other breakthroughs of the technological advancesbreakthroughs play a significant role in our lifeves.
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    • A great number of people cannot imagine their lives without PCs, microwave ovens, vacuum cleaners, cars and so on.
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    • What is more, but for diverse websites we are able to make the acquaintance with people around the world.
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    • What is more, but fordue to diverse websites we are able to make the acquaintance witheet people around the world.
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    • I cannot agree with these points of views because I believe people are not so silly that to spend all life in front of the screens of computers.
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    • I cannot agree with these points of views because I believe people are not so silly thatenough to spend all life in front of the screens ofof their lives in front of a computers screen.
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