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Văn bản từ 1_Dimon - English

  • Attempt 1

    • According to surveys - all of us are human beings and likely ability of socialize and communicate have been aligning to our nature, since a mankind was born.
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishing and constantly honing since our foundation time.
    • Vast innovations in area of media, evidently affects on utilized humankind's methods of receiving information.
    • People produces wide steps forward in technician areas as well as in methods of communication and receiving information.
  • The conceptions as a trade, a market shoves generation to fully immerse into era of TV and Internet devices of advertisement, which are meanwhile gradually has been substituting obsolete values as direct contact.
  • I can say it shoves or displaces them.
    • In my view, spelling that TV destroyed communication is profoundly hyperbolized.
    • For the pointed question, I rather make a rephrase like "Tv changes communication style".
  • With accepting a idea of proverb " Who posses information, posses world", 21 century let us pursuing the inexorable race for cultivating idols of digesting a ton of information, worshipping to the ratio between number word's received and time spent for this process.
  • Therefore, such as created properties upbrings in people intension to absorb data using TV, Internet, because for obtaining those information we can spend less energy and even do not need to go out from place of living.
  • However, simultaneously with this frame, we are nurturing a process of asserting more and more periods without live contact and waste a less time in participation in a real negotiation.
    • It lets the vital conversation stands behind technologies and progress .
  • Also, I believe that with time passed by, humankind settled and bounded things, that brings comfort condition and provide us with information.
  • Actually, I premise that the substitution TV with real communication would not look affordable for several people.
  • Habit of wasting less power in order to obtain more information has been already plugged into algorithm of our actions and there is nothing to be astonished of.
  • Mankind consumes the crops of nature's law, and we should work with facts, neither neglect and complain about them.
  • For example, avoiding TV also impels us stay in stress and anxious after work day.
  • At least some part of brain periodically persuades us for applying new and peculiar type of leisure, and for some of us contemplation a TV screen in abundance of information flows is the most relaxing thing.
  • By the way of conclusion, I am being up with the phrase "TV kills communication", but almost the situation needs to be rephrased "TV changed style of communication and receiving information".
  • Obviously, we bumped with circumstances of invention plenty electronically devices that are devoted to make our life easier, making our existence serenely.
  • In 21 century, Mankind is aimed and compelled with intention of gathering data about environment due to reducing the time and delays among real connections.
  • And specifically for this ambient state, TV, and social media sphere in generally, accelerates information's consume process.
  • The process of renovation walks with destroying obsolete methods of past mankind interaction, through replacing and revealing new sources and dimensions for development.

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  • Tiêu đề
  • câu 1
    • According to surveys - all of us are human beings and likely ability of socialize and communicate have been aligning to our nature, since a mankind was born.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • According to surveys -, all of us are human beings, and likelythe ability tof socialize and communicate haves likely been aligning toed with our nature, since a mankind was born.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1
  • câu 2
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishing and constantly honing since our foundation time.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishinged and constantly honinged since our foundation time.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
  • câu 3
  • câu 4
    • People produces wide steps forward in technician areas as well as in methods of communication and receiving information.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • People produces widhave made large steps forward in technicianal areas as well as in methods of communicationg and receiving information.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
  • câu 5
    • The conceptions as a trade, a market shoves generation to fully immerse into era of TV and Internet devices of advertisement, which are meanwhile gradually has been substituting obsolete values as direct contact.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
  • câu 6
  • câu 7
  • câu 8
  • câu 9
    • With accepting a idea of proverb " Who posses information, posses world", 21 century let us pursuing the inexorable race for cultivating idols of digesting a ton of information, worshipping to the ratio between number word's received and time spent for this process.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9
  • câu 10
    • Therefore, such as created properties upbrings in people intension to absorb data using TV, Internet, because for obtaining those information we can spend less energy and even do not need to go out from place of living.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • However, simultaneously with this frame, we are nurturing a process of asserting more and more periods without live contact and waste a less time in participation in a real negotiation.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
  • câu 13
    • Also, I believe that with time passed by, humankind settled and bounded things, that brings comfort condition and provide us with information.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13
  • câu 14
    • Actually, I premise that the substitution TV with real communication would not look affordable for several people.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
  • câu 15
    • Habit of wasting less power in order to obtain more information has been already plugged into algorithm of our actions and there is nothing to be astonished of.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15
  • câu 16
    • Mankind consumes the crops of nature's law, and we should work with facts, neither neglect and complain about them.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 16ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 16
  • câu 17
  • câu 18
    • At least some part of brain periodically persuades us for applying new and peculiar type of leisure, and for some of us contemplation a TV screen in abundance of information flows is the most relaxing thing.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18
  • câu 19
    • By the way of conclusion, I am being up with the phrase "TV kills communication", but almost the situation needs to be rephrased "TV changed style of communication and receiving information".
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19
  • câu 20
    • Obviously, we bumped with circumstances of invention plenty electronically devices that are devoted to make our life easier, making our existence serenely.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20
  • câu 21
    • In 21 century, Mankind is aimed and compelled with intention of gathering data about environment due to reducing the time and delays among real connections.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 21ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 21
  • câu 22
    • And specifically for this ambient state, TV, and social media sphere in generally, accelerates information's consume process.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 22ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 22
  • câu 23
    • The process of renovation walks with destroying obsolete methods of past mankind interaction, through replacing and revealing new sources and dimensions for development.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 23ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 23