Corrections

Teks daripada 1_Dimon - English

  • Attempt 1

    • According to surveys - all of us are human beings and likely ability of socialize and communicate have been aligning to our nature, since a mankind was born.
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishing and constantly honing since our foundation time.
    • Vast innovations in area of media, evidently affects on utilized humankind's methods of receiving information.
    • People produces wide steps forward in technician areas as well as in methods of communication and receiving information.
  • The conceptions as a trade, a market shoves generation to fully immerse into era of TV and Internet devices of advertisement, which are meanwhile gradually has been substituting obsolete values as direct contact.
  • I can say it shoves or displaces them.
    • In my view, spelling that TV destroyed communication is profoundly hyperbolized.
    • For the pointed question, I rather make a rephrase like "Tv changes communication style".
  • With accepting a idea of proverb " Who posses information, posses world", 21 century let us pursuing the inexorable race for cultivating idols of digesting a ton of information, worshipping to the ratio between number word's received and time spent for this process.
  • Therefore, such as created properties upbrings in people intension to absorb data using TV, Internet, because for obtaining those information we can spend less energy and even do not need to go out from place of living.
  • However, simultaneously with this frame, we are nurturing a process of asserting more and more periods without live contact and waste a less time in participation in a real negotiation.
    • It lets the vital conversation stands behind technologies and progress .
  • Also, I believe that with time passed by, humankind settled and bounded things, that brings comfort condition and provide us with information.
  • Actually, I premise that the substitution TV with real communication would not look affordable for several people.
  • Habit of wasting less power in order to obtain more information has been already plugged into algorithm of our actions and there is nothing to be astonished of.
  • Mankind consumes the crops of nature's law, and we should work with facts, neither neglect and complain about them.
  • For example, avoiding TV also impels us stay in stress and anxious after work day.
  • At least some part of brain periodically persuades us for applying new and peculiar type of leisure, and for some of us contemplation a TV screen in abundance of information flows is the most relaxing thing.
  • By the way of conclusion, I am being up with the phrase "TV kills communication", but almost the situation needs to be rephrased "TV changed style of communication and receiving information".
  • Obviously, we bumped with circumstances of invention plenty electronically devices that are devoted to make our life easier, making our existence serenely.
  • In 21 century, Mankind is aimed and compelled with intention of gathering data about environment due to reducing the time and delays among real connections.
  • And specifically for this ambient state, TV, and social media sphere in generally, accelerates information's consume process.
  • The process of renovation walks with destroying obsolete methods of past mankind interaction, through replacing and revealing new sources and dimensions for development.

MOHON BANTU UNTUK BETULKAN SETIAP AYAT! - English

  • Title
  • Ayat 1
    • According to surveys - all of us are human beings and likely ability of socialize and communicate have been aligning to our nature, since a mankind was born.
      Undi sekarang!
    • According to surveys -, all of us are human beings, and likelythe ability tof socialize and communicate haves likely been aligning toed with our nature, since a mankind was born.
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1
  • Ayat 2
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishing and constantly honing since our foundation time.
      Undi sekarang!
    • Tools of communication, like verbal and oral interaction skills , have been polishinged and constantly honinged since our foundation time.
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2
  • Ayat 3
  • Ayat 4
    • People produces wide steps forward in technician areas as well as in methods of communication and receiving information.
      Undi sekarang!
    • People produces widhave made large steps forward in technicianal areas as well as in methods of communicationg and receiving information.
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 4TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 4
  • Ayat 5
    • The conceptions as a trade, a market shoves generation to fully immerse into era of TV and Internet devices of advertisement, which are meanwhile gradually has been substituting obsolete values as direct contact.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 5TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 5
  • Ayat 6
  • Ayat 7
  • Ayat 8
  • Ayat 9
    • With accepting a idea of proverb " Who posses information, posses world", 21 century let us pursuing the inexorable race for cultivating idols of digesting a ton of information, worshipping to the ratio between number word's received and time spent for this process.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 9TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 9
  • Ayat 10
    • Therefore, such as created properties upbrings in people intension to absorb data using TV, Internet, because for obtaining those information we can spend less energy and even do not need to go out from place of living.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 10TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 10
  • Ayat 11
    • However, simultaneously with this frame, we are nurturing a process of asserting more and more periods without live contact and waste a less time in participation in a real negotiation.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 11TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 11
  • Ayat 12
  • Ayat 13
    • Also, I believe that with time passed by, humankind settled and bounded things, that brings comfort condition and provide us with information.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 13TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 13
  • Ayat 14
  • Ayat 15
    • Habit of wasting less power in order to obtain more information has been already plugged into algorithm of our actions and there is nothing to be astonished of.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 15TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 15
  • Ayat 16
  • Ayat 17
  • Ayat 18
    • At least some part of brain periodically persuades us for applying new and peculiar type of leisure, and for some of us contemplation a TV screen in abundance of information flows is the most relaxing thing.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 18TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 18
  • Ayat 19
    • By the way of conclusion, I am being up with the phrase "TV kills communication", but almost the situation needs to be rephrased "TV changed style of communication and receiving information".
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 19TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 19
  • Ayat 20
    • Obviously, we bumped with circumstances of invention plenty electronically devices that are devoted to make our life easier, making our existence serenely.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 20TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 20
  • Ayat 21
    • In 21 century, Mankind is aimed and compelled with intention of gathering data about environment due to reducing the time and delays among real connections.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 21TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 21
  • Ayat 22
  • Ayat 23
    • The process of renovation walks with destroying obsolete methods of past mankind interaction, through replacing and revealing new sources and dimensions for development.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 23TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 23