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  • A new invention

  • If you could invent something new, what product would you develop?
  • Use specific details to explain why this invention is needed.
    • Technology became an essential element in our life, and we do not know what could we do without it.
    • With the rapid increase in development and the demand on new invention in different aspects of life, to invent gas sensor would be an absolutely an umpaccable solution without a shodow of a doubt.
    • In hold this belief for two main reasons.
  • Firstly, it will prevent injury and death from occuring in confined spaces in the industry or any other places basically.
    • Therefore, it will warn the workers from get in places that has high risk of confinment and help in preventing thousands of life across the world.
    • For example, when I was attending university in Batna 2 years ago, my chemistry professor taught us the danger of falling in a places that has less oxigene due to the present of high quantity of toxic gases or flammable one.
    • He argued that not all the workers have access to the handy sensor for gases that profesional companies have, and it would be ashame of letting people die just because they don't have access to such materials.
    • From then, it downed on me that it would be an ideal solution to place a sensor that can detect gases and send warning when inflammable or toxic gases are present in the vacinity.
    • Secondly, inventing new sensor that would detect toxic gases and alarm workers and people from the danger in the area would also benefit the reputation of the company in a sense that accident of such type would be eleminated.
    • Using the money that would be saved for the budged on the losses that would occuring as resulting of such indesirable events in other fields.
    • For instance, when I was preparing for a presentation for my fire safety class last year, I presented some of the data of the researches that was been done on these accidents around the global, and it was almost affecting all the industrial sectors.
    • Which made it vital for companies to find a solution for this delimma that they are having.
    • It could be resolved by creating a model that detect harmful gases and sending signals to the operator in the control station to warn the workers from geting closer to these places in order to prevent unwanted events.
    • In conclusion, inventing new elements in our life that would help us securing ourselves and our environment would bring Myriad benefits for families and societies.
    • Hence, creating a sensor that detects inflammable or toxic gases would be an umpaccble invention in the industry.
    • It will not only benefit the reputation of companies, but it would also prevent injuries and death from occuring during working in plants.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • With the rapid increase in development and the demand on new invention in different aspects of life, to invent gas sensor would be an absolutely an umpaccable solution without a shodow of a doubt.
      Stem nou!
    • With the rapid increase in development and the demand onfor new invention in different aspects of life, to invent gas sensors would be an absolutely an uimpaeccable solution without a shoadow of a doubt.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 4VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 4
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    • Therefore, it will warn the workers from get in places that has high risk of confinment and help in preventing thousands of life across the world.
      Stem nou!
    • Therefore, it will warn the workers from getting in places that hasve a high risk of confinmentteminations and help in preventing thousands of lifeves across the world.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 7VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 7
  • Sentence 8
    • For example, when I was attending university in Batna 2 years ago, my chemistry professor taught us the danger of falling in a places that has less oxigene due to the present of high quantity of toxic gases or flammable one.
      Stem nou!
    • For example, when I was attending university in Batna 2 years ago, my chemistry professor taught us the danger of falling in a places that hasve less oxigene due to the presentce of high quantity of toxic gases or flammable onegases.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 8VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 8
  • Sentence 9
    • He argued that not all the workers have access to the handy sensor for gases that profesional companies have, and it would be ashame of letting people die just because they don't have access to such materials.
      Stem nou!
    • He argued that not all the workers have access to the handy sensors for gases that professional companies have, and it would be a shame tof letting people die just because they don't have access to such materialthese sensors.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 9VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 9
  • Sentence 10
    • From then, it downed on me that it would be an ideal solution to place a sensor that can detect gases and send warning when inflammable or toxic gases are present in the vacinity.
      Stem nou!
    • From then, it doawned on me that it would be an ideal solution to place a sensor that can detect gases and send warnings when inflammable or toxic gases are present in the vaicinity.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 10VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 10
  • Sentence 11
    • Secondly, inventing new sensor that would detect toxic gases and alarm workers and people from the danger in the area would also benefit the reputation of the company in a sense that accident of such type would be eleminated.
      Stem nou!
    • Secondly, inventing new sensors that would detect toxic gases and alarm workers and people from the danger in the area would also benefit the reputation of the company in a sense that accidents of such type would be eleiminated.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 11VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 11
  • Sentence 12
    • Using the money that would be saved for the budged on the losses that would occuring as resulting of such indesirable events in other fields.
      Stem nou!
    • Using the money that would be saved for the budgedt on the losses that would occuringe as resulting of such indesirable events in other fields.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 12VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 12
  • Sentence 13
    • For instance, when I was preparing for a presentation for my fire safety class last year, I presented some of the data of the researches that was been done on these accidents around the global, and it was almost affecting all the industrial sectors.
      Stem nou!
    • For instance, when I was preparing for a presentation for my fire safety class last year, I presented some of the data of the researches that washave been done on these accidents around the globale/world, and it was almost affecting all the industrial sectors.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 13VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 13
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    • It could be resolved by creating a model that detect harmful gases and sending signals to the operator in the control station to warn the workers from geting closer to these places in order to prevent unwanted events.
      Stem nou!
    • It could be resolved by creating a model that detects harmful gases and sending signals to the operator in the control station to warn the workers from geting closer to these places in order to prevent unwanted events.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 15VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 15
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    • In conclusion, inventing new elements in our life that would help us securing ourselves and our environment would bring Myriad benefits for families and societies.
      Stem nou!
    • In conclusion, inventing new elements in our life that would help us securing ourselves and our environment would bring Mmyriad benefits for families and societies.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 16VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 16
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    • It will not only benefit the reputation of companies, but it would also prevent injuries and death from occuring during working in plants.
      Stem nou!
    • It will not only benefit the reputation of companies, but it would also prevent injuries and death from occuring during working in plants.
    • VOEG ’n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 18VOEG 'n NUWE KORREKSIE BY! - Sentence 18