Nhờ sửa bài giúp

Văn bản từ Brocky - English

    • A New high school in my community.

  • The promt: It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community.
    • Do you support or oppose this plan? Why?
  • Use specific reasons and details in your answer.
    • Studying is vital for the society, and it will help in raising an educative community which will improve the condition of life for the people who are living in it.
  • In my opinion, building a new high school in my community is very important for two main reasons.
    • The first reason is that it will assure of allowing the majority of the students to have a chance of studying in high school, and benefiting from free schooling in order to develop the society for an ideal community.
  • For example, when I was studying in high school 7 years ago, it was hard for me to travel from my house every day in order to reach the bus station on time, so I could attend my classes on time.
    • Otherwise I drop classes on that day.
  • It contributed also in adding more pressure on me and other students.
    • Unfourtenately, it caused many students to abondon studying because of these harsh condtions that we were facing.
    • On the other hand, if we had a high school in our community, we wouldn't need to get up early, nor students would drop their classes because of these hard situations.
    • As you can see, having a new school in my community would be a wonderful solution for stoping students from droping their classes and providing for them the best conditions for study.
    • The second reason is it will help students to improve their grades and to take advantage on the time that they use to travel while studying away from their local community.
    • Because instead of getting up two hours ahead of normal students who are living near the high school. it would be an ideal timing for them to prepare for their classes and review their notes in order to perform well in their exams.
    • For instance, when I used to study in my high school that was about an hour away from my home, I had to sleep early every day in order to get up early, so I will not miss the bus to arrive on time in school.
  • I had a limited schedule which restricted me from playing and hanging out with my friends in my community.
    • Because usually I come back fatigue from school and I would just rest for a while, and review my classes at night and then sleep early because of the tirsom that I had from traveling.
    • As you can see, having a new school in my community would definitely be an ideal solution for helping students to perform well on their exams, and stop dropped their classes due to the harsh conditions they may have during studying away from their local community.
    • To sum it up, it is a must for parents to enssure a bright future for their childrens, and one of the solutions is that by making sure that their children are studying in a near school to their houses, so they would invest the majority of their timing in studying and review for their classes.
    • Especially for those who are lacking high school in their local community, it is necessary for them to accept building a new high school so their children would have a better education and thus a bright future.

Xin hãy chỉnh sửa từng câu giúp tôi! - English

  • Tiêu đề
  • câu 1
  • câu 2
  • câu 3
  • câu 4
    • Studying is vital for the society, and it will help in raising an educative community which will improve the condition of life for the people who are living in it.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Studying is vital for thea society, and it will help in raising an educative community which will improve the condition of life for the people who are living in it.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
  • câu 5
  • câu 6
    • The first reason is that it will assure of allowing the majority of the students to have a chance of studying in high school, and benefiting from free schooling in order to develop the society for an ideal community.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • The first reason is that it (will assure of allowing) the majority of the students to have a chance of studying in high school, and benefiting from free schooling in order to develop the society for an ideal community.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
  • câu 7
    • For example, when I was studying in high school 7 years ago, it was hard for me to travel from my house every day in order to reach the bus station on time, so I could attend my classes on time.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
  • câu 9
  • câu 10
    • Unfourtenately, it caused many students to abondon studying because of these harsh condtions that we were facing.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Unfourteunately, it caused many students to aboandon studying because of these harsh condtions that we were facing.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • On the other hand, if we had a high school in our community, we wouldn't need to get up early, nor students would drop their classes because of these hard situations.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • On the other hand,But if we had a high school in our community, we wouldn't need to get up early, norand students wouldn't need to drop their classes because of these hard situations.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
    • As you can see, having a new school in my community would be a wonderful solution for stoping students from droping their classes and providing for them the best conditions for study.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • As you can see, having a new school in my community would be a wonderful solution forto stoping students from having to droping their classes and providing for them the best conditions forto study.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
    • The second reason is it will help students to improve their grades and to take advantage on the time that they use to travel while studying away from their local community.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • The second reason is that it will help students to improve their grades and to take advantage on the time that they use to travel while studying away from their local community.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13
  • câu 14
    • Because instead of getting up two hours ahead of normal students who are living near the high school. it would be an ideal timing for them to prepare for their classes and review their notes in order to perform well in their exams.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Because instead of getting up two hours ahead of normal students who are living near the high school., it would be an ideal timing for them to prepare for their classes and review their notes in order to perform well ion their exams.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
  • câu 15
    • For instance, when I used to study in my high school that was about an hour away from my home, I had to sleep early every day in order to get up early, so I will not miss the bus to arrive on time in school.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • For instance, when I used to study in mygo to the high school that was about an hour away from my home, I had to sleep early every day in order to get up early, so I will noouldn't miss the bus to arrive on time in schoolat school in time.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15
  • câu 16
    • I had a limited schedule which restricted me from playing and hanging out with my friends in my community.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 16ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 16
  • câu 17
    • Because usually I come back fatigue from school and I would just rest for a while, and review my classes at night and then sleep early because of the tirsom that I had from traveling.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Because usually I come back fatigue from school exhausted and I would just rest for a while, and review my classes at night and then sleep early because of the tirsom that I habeing tired from traveling that day.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17
  • câu 18
    • As you can see, having a new school in my community would definitely be an ideal solution for helping students to perform well on their exams, and stop dropped their classes due to the harsh conditions they may have during studying away from their local community.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • As you can see, having a new school in my community would definitely be an ideal solution forto helping students to perform well on their exams, and sso they don't have top dropped their classes due to the harsh conditions they may havexperience during studying awayfar from their local community.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18
  • câu 19
    • To sum it up, it is a must for parents to enssure a bright future for their childrens, and one of the solutions is that by making sure that their children are studying in a near school to their houses, so they would invest the majority of their timing in studying and review for their classes.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • To sum it up, it is a must for parents to enssure a bright future for their childrens, and one of the solutions is that byo makinge sure that their children are studying in a near school near to their housesme, so they would invest the majority of their timing in studying and previewparing for their classes.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19
  • câu 20
    • Especially for those who are lacking high school in their local community, it is necessary for them to accept building a new high school so their children would have a better education and thus a bright future.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Especially for those who are lacking a high school in their local community, it is necessary for them to accept building a new high school so their children would have a better education and thus a brighter future. ¶
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20