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  • Pets should be treated like family members

    • Animals have an impact on the life of human being, there are two kind of animals, the one who lives in the wild, and the one that lives with the human being.
    • The latter one some people prefer to treat them nicely and consider them as a part of a family and treat them like family members, others prefer not treating them as family members.
  • In my opinion, pets should be treated like family members for two reasons.
    • The first reason is because playing with them is more fun, due to the fact that pets live with us in the same house, and they're most of the time close to us.
  • It's not fair to mistreat them just because they're animals, and not taking advantage of playing with them and walking them outside the house time to time.
    • For example, when I was 7 years old, I lived with my parents in a small town, I didnt have too much friends due to the majority of people are adult or old.
    • I had a dog, I used to take him outside with me walking together and playing with him, I enjoyed most of my time with him, especially when I feel lonely.
    • The only one who never abandoned me was my little dog, who used to try each time to play with me and make me laugh and enjoy my time that I spent with him.
  • Which helped me a lot psychologically to relax and overcome that lack of friendship that I had.
    • As you can see, pets are very important by helping lonley people to carry on their lives without being left alone and abandoned by other people.
    • The second reason is that most of the pets are helpfull in protecting the family from threats that may come from outside.
    • For instance, I remember when I moved with my parents to different area where I live, everything was strange to me, and time to time I pass through people who are being rude and trying to provoke me, untill once three of them came behind me when I was taking my dog outise and walking with him, they tried to tease me and steal my money.
    • I was helpless and couldnt defend myself before these gang's group.
    • And all of the sudden my dog jumped on the person on my right and throwed him down, and turend to the one who was hold me from the back and bite him in his leg.
    • While the third guy run immediately after what he saw what happened to his two fellow.
  • As you can see, pets are very helpful to their owners.
  • In sum, having a pet is vital thing especially in our time that we live in.
    • Some of the people argue that pets should be left outside the house and not treat them as family members.
    • I believe that pets should be treated as a family members not just because being with them is more fun but also they're very helpful especially when danger threats a family member.

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  • Tiêu đề
  • câu 1
    • Animals have an impact on the life of human being, there are two kind of animals, the one who lives in the wild, and the one that lives with the human being.
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    • Animals have an impact on the life of human beings, there are two kind of animals, the one who lives in the wild, and the one that lives with the human beings.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1
  • câu 2
    • The latter one some people prefer to treat them nicely and consider them as a part of a family and treat them like family members, others prefer not treating them as family members.
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    • The latter one sSome people prefer the latter, to treat them nicely and consider them as a part of atheir family and treat them like family members, others prefer not treating them as family members.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
  • câu 3
  • câu 4
    • The first reason is because playing with them is more fun, due to the fact that pets live with us in the same house, and they're most of the time close to us.
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    • The first reason is because playing with them is morea lot of fun, due to the fact that pets live with us in the same house, and they're the closest to us most of the time close to us.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
  • câu 5
    • It's not fair to mistreat them just because they're animals, and not taking advantage of playing with them and walking them outside the house time to time.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
  • câu 6
    • For example, when I was 7 years old, I lived with my parents in a small town, I didnt have too much friends due to the majority of people are adult or old.
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    • For example, when I was 7 years old, I lived with my parents in a small town,. I didnt have too muchany friends due to the fact that the majority of people awere either adults or old.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
  • câu 7
    • I had a dog, I used to take him outside with me walking together and playing with him, I enjoyed most of my time with him, especially when I feel lonely.
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    • I had a dog,. I used to take him outside with me walking together and playing with him,. I enjoyed most of my time with him, especially when I feelt lonely.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
    • The only one who never abandoned me was my little dog, who used to try each time to play with me and make me laugh and enjoy my time that I spent with him.
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    • The only one who never abandoned me was my little dog, who used to try each time to play with me andll the time, make me laugh and made me enjoy my time that I spent with him.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
  • câu 10
    • As you can see, pets are very important by helping lonley people to carry on their lives without being left alone and abandoned by other people.
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    • As you can see, pets are very important by helping lonlely people to carry on their lives without being left alone and abandoned by other people.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • The second reason is that most of the pets are helpfull in protecting the family from threats that may come from outside.
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    • The second reason is that most of the pets are helpfull in protecting their family from threats that may come from outside.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
    • For instance, I remember when I moved with my parents to different area where I live, everything was strange to me, and time to time I pass through people who are being rude and trying to provoke me, untill once three of them came behind me when I was taking my dog outise and walking with him, they tried to tease me and steal my money.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • For instance, I remember when I moved with my parents to different area where I live, eto a different area with my parents. Everything was strange to me, and time to time I passed through people who awere being rude and trying to provoke me, untill once time three of them came up behind me when I was taking my dog outise and walking with him, tside. They tried to tease me and steal my money.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
  • câu 14
    • And all of the sudden my dog jumped on the person on my right and throwed him down, and turend to the one who was hold me from the back and bite him in his leg.
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    • And all of thea sudden my dog jumped on the person on my right and throwedew him down, and turened around to the one who was holding me from the back and bite him in his leg.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
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  • câu 18
    • Some of the people argue that pets should be left outside the house and not treat them as family members.
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    • Some of the people argue that pets should be left outside the house and not treat themshouldn't be treated as family members.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18
  • câu 19
    • I believe that pets should be treated as a family members not just because being with them is more fun but also they're very helpful especially when danger threats a family member.
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    • I believe that pets should be treated as a family members, not just because being with them is more fun, but also because they're very helpful e. Especially when danger threats a family member. ¶
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19