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  • Dear Ms. MAWSON, I am contacting you because I am deeply interested in the Brand Controller position that is published on your website.
    • I originally obtained a degree in Business Studies, and I’ve currently been working in Paris as a Commercial Controller for one year and a half for the biggest French car maker.
    • Now I would like to have a challenging work experience in the UK.
    • I chose to apply for a job in your company because Entrepreneurship is one of the values that you defend and that I need to be independent in my work.
    • I am a result oriented person, always committed to enhance working processes.
    • For example, I have been in charge of the P&L leasing retreatment for all the G7 European subsidiaries.
    • I had to reduce variances between Estimate and Actual by 20% year to date vs. the same period in 2012.
    • To do so, I have implemented controls on the figures that we obtained from different IT sources, written user guides to help CFO calculate the estimate, and developed key indicators to follow up the action results.
    • At the end of June, we have cut the variances by 27% vs. 2012.
    • Furthermore, I have worked during 3 years in a support department for the SAP applications Business Object Finance and BW which has provided me a good command of financial ERP.
    • I would like the opportunity to be interviewed in person for this position in order to discuss my qualifications further at your time and convenience.
  • Also, I would be glad to provide you with any additional information needed.
  • Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely,

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • Dear Ms. MAWSON, I am contacting you because I am deeply interested in the Brand Controller position that is published on your website.
      Voĉdoni nun!
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    • I originally obtained a degree in Business Studies, and I’ve currently been working in Paris as a Commercial Controller for one year and a half for the biggest French car maker.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • I originally obtained a degree in Business Studies, and I’ve am currently been working in Paris as a Commercial Controller for one year and a half for the biggest French car makand have been for the last year and a half France's largest car manufacturer.
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 2ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 2
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    • I chose to apply for a job in your company because Entrepreneurship is one of the values that you defend and that I need to be independent in my work.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • I chose to apply for a job in your company because Entrepreneurship is one of the, the ability to innovate and work independently (a values that you defend and that I need to be independent in my work), is one of my strengths.
    • I chose toam applying for a job in your company because Entrepreneurship is one of the values that you defend and that I need to be independent in my workyour key values and working independently is one of my strengths.
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 4ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 4
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    • To do so, I have implemented controls on the figures that we obtained from different IT sources, written user guides to help CFO calculate the estimate, and developed key indicators to follow up the action results.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • To do sothis end, I have implemented controls on the figures that we obtained from different IT sources, written user guides to help CFO calculate the estimate, and developed key indicators to follow up the action results.
    • To do so, I have implemented controls on the figures that we obtained from different IT sources, written user guides to help the CFO calculate the estimate, and developed key indicators to follow up the action results.
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 8ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 8
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    • Furthermore, I have worked during 3 years in a support department for the SAP applications Business Object Finance and BW which has provided me a good command of financial ERP.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • Furthermore, I have worked during 3 yearsthree years of experience working in a support department for the SAP applications Business Object Finance and BW which has provided me with a good command of financial ERP.
    • ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 10ALDONI NOVAN KOREKTON - Frazo 10
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    • I would like the opportunity to be interviewed in person for this position in order to discuss my qualifications further at your time and convenience.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • I would like the opportunity to be interviewed in person for this position in order to discuss my qualifications further at your time and convenience.
    • I would like the opportunity to bfor a live interviewed in person for this position in order to discuss my qualifications further at your time and convenience.
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