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Teks daripada Diane141 - English

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  • I would like to illustrate the notion of progress by talking about the evolution of the technology, the science and social relationships.
  • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
  • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
  • - New technologies are everywhere : multimedia, household electrical, phone, car, medical...
  • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
  • All products (computeur : macintosh ; touchpad: Ipad ; phone: Iphone ; Mp4 : Ipod but also applications).
  • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
  • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
  • Now, let's focus on the science evolution which leads me to my second part of the idea of progress.
  • - Scientific discoveries: physics, in astrology, in medicine, in genetics...
  • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
  • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
  • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
  • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
  • - subservience of the women : The Taming of the Shrew by Shakerspeare : how must be a wife with hen husband.
  • Modern woman : different customs because men and women become equal (family) Cooking, household, works, children...
  • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
  • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
  • To conclude, we can see that the progress affeting our life everyday in a lot of fields to allow us to live easily, learn or survive.
  • To my mind, it would be impossible for the civilized man to live without his new technologies because they are an integral part of his life.
  • However, it stays some more of progress to be made concerning social inequalities.

MOHON BANTU UNTUK BETULKAN SETIAP AYAT! - English

  • Title
  • Ayat 1
    • I would like to illustrate the notion of progress by talking about the evolution of the technology, the science and social relationships.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1
  • Ayat 2
    • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2
  • Ayat 3
    • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 3TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 3
  • Ayat 4
  • Ayat 5
    • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 5TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 5
  • Ayat 6
  • Ayat 7
    • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 7TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 7
  • Ayat 8
    • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 8TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 8
  • Ayat 9
  • Ayat 10
  • Ayat 11
    • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 11TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 11
  • Ayat 12
    • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 12TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 12
  • Ayat 13
    • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 13TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 13
  • Ayat 14
    • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 14TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 14
  • Ayat 15
  • Ayat 16
  • Ayat 17
    • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 17TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 17
  • Ayat 18
    • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 18TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 18
  • Ayat 19
  • Ayat 20
    • To my mind, it would be impossible for the civilized man to live without his new technologies because they are an integral part of his life.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 20TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 20
  • Ayat 21