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Scriptum ab Diane141 - English

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  • I would like to illustrate the notion of progress by talking about the evolution of the technology, the science and social relationships.
  • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
  • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
  • - New technologies are everywhere : multimedia, household electrical, phone, car, medical...
  • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
  • All products (computeur : macintosh ; touchpad: Ipad ; phone: Iphone ; Mp4 : Ipod but also applications).
  • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
  • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
  • Now, let's focus on the science evolution which leads me to my second part of the idea of progress.
  • - Scientific discoveries: physics, in astrology, in medicine, in genetics...
  • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
  • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
  • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
  • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
  • - subservience of the women : The Taming of the Shrew by Shakerspeare : how must be a wife with hen husband.
  • Modern woman : different customs because men and women become equal (family) Cooking, household, works, children...
  • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
  • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
  • To conclude, we can see that the progress affeting our life everyday in a lot of fields to allow us to live easily, learn or survive.
  • To my mind, it would be impossible for the civilized man to live without his new technologies because they are an integral part of his life.
  • However, it stays some more of progress to be made concerning social inequalities.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • Progress is made move forward, made go towards an upper degree or a regular evolution of the humanity, the civilization towards an ideal aim.What types of progress affect our life?
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    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 2ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 2
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    • First, I will speak about the new technology, then secondly, I'll deal with the science progresses and to finish, I'll talk about the social relationships'evolution.
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 3ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 3
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    • - many improvements : quality (image, sound, power...), esthetics, yield ... and incite people to consume more to indulge itself - ex : it's the case for apple technology (created by Steve Jobs the 1st April 1976) which seduces the population by his novelty and his quality.
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 5ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 5
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    • Text from an unofficial bigraphy of Steve Jobs - Allow better a one quality of life : food processor (to daily life as a vacuum cleaner for example), improvement of the equipments of medicine improved health, broadcasting of the information: invention of the radio, of tv so allow to know what surrounds us.
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 7ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 7
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    • - Negative : social relationships weakened because people often speak through phone or computer so their life become virtual and then social contacts neglected (sites of meeting, sms, webcam...).
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 8ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 8
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    • - consequences : new medicine, vaccines (against gripp H1N1 recently), vast of knowledge on the celestial bodies which surrounds the Earth (The Moon : first step the 20 July 1969 ; Mars: sending of several robots at present Curiosity), research of new medical tehnics (against the ageing for example with a procesus of regeneration of the old organs – The Guardian ; or transplants posibility) and genetics (with the posibility transfers of genes to improve the cultures / cloning to maintain endangered species or be able to create model of study on particular diseases).
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 11ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 11
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    • - Negatives : ethical problems (cloning because more individuality) + possible scientific error mortals or at least very grave (human stroke because of anti-ageing products but no the mouse guinea pig) Now, we are going to concentrate on the social relationships'evolution which leads me to my third part of the idea of progress.
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 12ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 12
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    • - Racism : A lot formerly to the blacks (slaveries, persecution in certain countries) – Black like me by John Howard Griffin, and member of a religious order, ethnic groups but improvement with a good instruction, educations (less educational at the end of 19 ème century than today ).
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 13ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 13
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    • Blacks in the power (Barack Obama), recognized as model of justice between the people (Nelson Mandela), world celebrities (Yannick Noah at Roland Garros, singer)...
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 14ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 14
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    • + laws for a bigger independence of the women (vote: France in 1942, abortion, work), suffragettes (created in 1903) in England, who fighting for their voting rights.
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 17ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 17
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    • - today yet : inspite of laws + education, still of the racism in most of the countries (Toubirat, minister of justice and descendant of slave, offended by female monkey) / disparity salary man-woman (for the same work, the men gain 30 % more than the women) + more unemployment affects the women + often less prestigious jobs for women than for men.
      Elige nunc !
    • ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 18ADDE NOVAM EMENDATIONEM! - Sententia 18
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