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  • How to improve the town centre: a proposal

  • The aims of this proposal are to describe the current state of the city centre, identify areas of improvement, and offer recommendations on exactly what improvements can be achieved.
  • At the present moment, the city centre offers a limited variety of leisure spots to go.
    • Following a survey among locals living in the area that have been living in the area for at least ten years, the following areas/aspects for improvement can be highlighted: There is small shopping centre with around 4 shops to shop from as well as an old cinema that was built more than fifteen years.
    • Furthermore, there is no gym in the centre, only a small fitness space with outdoors gym equipment in a park, targeted to the older audience.
    • Finally, in regards to the transport, the bus rage is very limited and buses do not run as frequently as they should.
  • It is vital to address the issues raised in the survey.
    • Therefore, the following actions ought to be performed with a view to improving the city centre: It is advisable to build up-to-date facilities, like a bigger shopping centre with all types of shops and a new cinema with more rooms and better screens and theater seats.
    • In one hand, it would create more job opportunities which would translate in a bigger local purchasing power, in the other hand it would also attract more visitors from nearby towns which would mean an increase in the town’s overall wealth.
    • A gym should also be built in order to make it easier for residents to improve their health if they wished to.
    • Last but not least, the buses should go further to meet the needs of people that depend on public transportation.
    • It would also mean more people having the opportunity to come to the town and spend money here.
    • All of these measures, if promptly implemented, are surely going to increase resident’s satisfaction with their city centre.

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    • The aims of this proposal are to describe the current state of the city centre, identify areas of improvement, and offer recommendations on exactly what improvements can be achieved.
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    • Following a survey among locals living in the area that have been living in the area for at least ten years, the following areas/aspects for improvement can be highlighted: There is small shopping centre with around 4 shops to shop from as well as an old cinema that was built more than fifteen years.
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    • Following a survey among locals living in the area that have been living in the area for at least ten years, the following areas/aspects for improvement can be highlighted:¶

      There is       a small shopping centre with around 4 shops to shop from as well as an old cinema that was built more than fifteen years ago.
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    • Following a survey among locals living in the area that have been living in the area for at least ten years, the following areas/aspects for improvement can be highlighted:¶

      There is       a small shopping centre with around 4 shops to shop from as well as an old cinema that was built more than fifteen years ago.
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    • Furthermore, there is no gym in the centre, only a small fitness space with outdoors gym equipment in a park, targeted to the older audience.
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    • Furthermore, there is no gym in the centre,; only a small fitness space with outdoors gym equipment in a park, targeted to the older audience.
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    • Furthermore, there is no gym in the centre, only a small fitness space with outdoors gym equipment in a park, targeted to thewards an older audience.
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    • Finally, in regards to the transport, the bus rage is very limited and buses do not run as frequently as they should.
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    • Finally, in regards to the transport, the bus coverage is very limited and buses do not run as frequently as they should.
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    • Finally, in regards to the transport, the bus coverage is very limited and buses do not run as frequently as they should.
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    • Finally, inwith regards to the transport, the bus rage isbus services are very limited and buses do not run as frequently as they should.
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    • Therefore, the following actions ought to be performed with a view to improving the city centre: It is advisable to build up-to-date facilities, like a bigger shopping centre with all types of shops and a new cinema with more rooms and better screens and theater seats.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Therefore, the following actions ought to be performed with a view to improving the city centre:¶

      It is advisable to build up-to-date facilities,       likesuch as a bigger shopping centre with all types of shops and a new cinema with more rooms and better screens and theatere seats.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
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    • In one hand, it would create more job opportunities which would translate in a bigger local purchasing power, in the other hand it would also attract more visitors from nearby towns which would mean an increase in the town’s overall wealth.
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    • IOn one hand, it would create more job opportunities which would translate in a bigger local purchasing power, i. On the other hand, it would also attract more visitors from nearby towns which would mean an increase in the town’'s overall wealth.
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    • InOn the one hand, it would create more job opportunities which would translate in a biggto greater local purchasing power, i. On the other hand, it would also attract more visitors from nearby towns which would, meaning an increase in the town’s overall wealth.
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    • Last but not least, the buses should go further to meet the needs of people that depend on public transportation.
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    • Last but not least, the busbus routes should go furtherbe extended to meet the needs of people that depend on public transportation.
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    • All of these measures, if promptly implemented, are surely going to increase resident’s satisfaction with their city centre.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • All of these measures, if promptly implemented, are surely going to increase resident’s satisfaction with their city centre.
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