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  • Formal letter

    • For the attention of the magazine’s editor.
    • I write this letter to express my deep dissatisfaction with the photographs your magazine has recently published showing my family and me while we were on holiday.
    • To start with, these photographs were not taken with my permission nor with my family member’s permission.
  • My intention was to enjoy a peaceful holiday.
    • Instead I have been unceasingly stalked by utterly impolite paparazzi that ignored repeatedly my humble request not to take any photo and respect my private life.
    • Not only they invaded my privacy but to make matters worse they took photos of my two years old son which is unacceptable.
    • It is illegal to photograph a minor and morally questionable.
    • To top it off one of the photographs got excessively close to my wife and hit her causing her physical damage.
    • Due to this accident, we had to go to the hospital and in doing that we had to cut short our holiday.
  • This kind of behaviour is unacceptable and any public figure should go through this type of situations.
    • I politely request that the photographs are withdrawn from the magazine as soon as possible for the psychological and physical damage these photographs have caused me and my family.
    • Where I the editor of the magazine I would attempt to not invade anyone’s privacy.
    • The vast majority of people appreciate their privacy and wish to keep their private lives just like so, private and so do celebrities.
    • Even though sometimes people do not view us as normal people, we are in fact regular people.
    • I genuinely hope for this magazine to improve the quality of its content in the future.
    • I hope this issue can be resolved promptly.
    • Kind regards, Mike

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    • I write this letter to express my deep dissatisfaction with the photographs your magazine has recently published showing my family and me while we were on holiday.
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    • I write this letter to express my deepest dissatisfaction with the photographs your magazine has recently published showdepicting my family and meyself while we were on holiday.
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    • Instead I have been unceasingly stalked by utterly impolite paparazzi that ignored repeatedly my humble request not to take any photo and respect my private life.
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    • Instead I have been unceasingly stalked by utterly impolite paparazzi that ignoredwho repeatedly ignored my humble request not to take any photographs and to respect my private life.
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    • Not only they invaded my privacy but to make matters worse they took photos of my two years old son which is unacceptable.
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    • Not only have they invaded my privacy but, to make matters worse, they took photos of my two years old son which is- something totally unacceptable.
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    • To top it off one of the photographs got excessively close to my wife and hit her causing her physical damage.
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    • To top it offIn an effort to surpass their already disgusting behaviour, one of the photographsaparazzi got excessively close to my wife and hit her - thereby causing her physical damage.
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    • I politely request that the photographs are withdrawn from the magazine as soon as possible for the psychological and physical damage these photographs have caused me and my family.
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    • I am therefore politely requesting that the photographs arbe withdrawn from the magazineyour publication as soon as possible fordue to the psychological and physical damage these photographs have caused me and my familyimages have resulted for both my family and myself. ¶

      Furthermore, I demand that the person or persons responsible be held to account for their actions, dismissal from employment being an obvious course of action in this instance      .
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    • Where I the editor of the magazine I would attempt to not invade anyone’s privacy.
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    • Where I the editor of the magazine I would attempt to not inva(what comes after, you would not say in a formal letter to an editor de manyone’s privacy.ding the removal of photographs)
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    • The vast majority of people appreciate their privacy and wish to keep their private lives just like so, private and so do celebrities.
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    • The vast majority of people appreciate their privacy and wish to keep their private lives just like so, private and so do celebrities.(what comes after, you would not say in a formal letter to an editor demanding the removal of photographs)
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    • Even though sometimes people do not view us as normal people, we are in fact regular people.
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    • Even though sometimes people do not view us as normal people, we are in fact regular people.(what comes after, you would not say in a formal letter to an editor demanding the removal of photographs)
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    • I genuinely hope for this magazine to improve the quality of its content in the future.
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    • I genuinely hope for this magazine to improve the quality of its content (what comes after, you would not say in a formal letter to an editor demanding the future.removal of photographs)
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