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  • Essay about modern lifestyles

    • Modern lifestyle can endanger our life in the sense that the application of some good practices like respect of sleeping hours, regular physical exercise or healthy food tend to be neglected.
    • This essay focus on two major problems directly related to modern lifestyle: the lack of sportive activities and the bad alimentation.
    • Many adults do not practise sport regularly and spend most of their working time sit on a chair.
    • However, I think a part of them regard physical activities as important for their health but have other priorities which prevent them to liberate time at this effect.
  • We live in a society in which many people must juggle between their work and a family life.
    • In this context, the modern lifestyle lets usually little time to do sport.
  • The problem is that the lack of practice makes physical exercise more difficult and often less appreciable.
    • For example, running can have a relaxing effect, but a person who is not used to it, is less susceptible to enjoy doing it, because the activity requires more effort on his part.
    • In these conditions, it can be also more discouraging for someone to liberate free time for something that he does not like doing.
    • Then, bad alimentary habits, which are often reproduced from a generation to the next, are another problem.
    • Consummation of meat is often too much important, which increases the risk of cardiovascular diseases.
    • In the same way, sugar takes an important place in our society despites health problems which can resulted of an excessive consummation.
    • In addition, some people do not often take the time to cook and are used to buy their meals in fast foods.
    • In conclusion, unhealth alimentation and lack of physical activities are not the only problems of modern lifestyle, but they count among the mains in the sense that they can influence a lot physical and psychological wellbeing.

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  • câu 1
    • Modern lifestyle can endanger our life in the sense that the application of some good practices like respect of sleeping hours, regular physical exercise or healthy food tend to be neglected.
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    • Modern lifestyles can endanger our life in the sense that the application of some good practices like respect ofor sleeping hours, regular physical exercise or healthy food tend to be neglected.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1
  • câu 2
    • This essay focus on two major problems directly related to modern lifestyle: the lack of sportive activities and the bad alimentation.
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    • This essay focuses on two major problems directly related to modern lifestyles: the lack of sportiveng activities and the bad alimentationpoor diet.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
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    • However, I think a part of them regard physical activities as important for their health but have other priorities which prevent them to liberate time at this effect.
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    • However, I think a part of themsome people regard physical activities as important for their health but have other priorities which prevent them to liberate time at this effectfrom having free time for doing these.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
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    • The problem is that the lack of practice makes physical exercise more difficult and often less appreciable.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
    • For example, running can have a relaxing effect, but a person who is not used to it, is less susceptible to enjoy doing it, because the activity requires more effort on his part.
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    • For example, running can have a relaxing effect, but a person who is not used to it, is less susceptiable to enjoy doing it, because thesuch an activity requires more effort on hithat person's part.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
    • In these conditions, it can be also more discouraging for someone to liberate free time for something that he does not like doing.
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    • In these conditionircumstances, it can be also more discouraging for someone to liberatefind free time for something that he does not like doing.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9
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    • In the same way, sugar takes an important place in our society despites health problems which can resulted of an excessive consummation.
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    • In the same waSimilarly, sugar takes an important place in our society despites health problems which can resulted of an from excessive consummaption.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
    • In addition, some people do not often take the time to cook and are used to buy their meals in fast foods.
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    • In addition, some people do not often take the time to cook and are used to buying their meals infrom fast food outlets, thereby exacerbating bad eating habits.
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  • câu 14
    • In conclusion, unhealth alimentation and lack of physical activities are not the only problems of modern lifestyle, but they count among the mains in the sense that they can influence a lot physical and psychological wellbeing.
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    • In conclusion, unhealth alimenty eationg and the lack of physical activities are not the only problems of modern lifestyle, but they count among the main ones in the sense that they can substantially influence a lot physical and psychological well being. ¶
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