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  • Should songs with violent lyrics/topics be banned?

    • Nowadays, we are living in the era of the hypersexualizing, romanticization of criminality and drug trafficking, which is seen as a symbol of power and status in some communities.
    • At the same time, that is a serious and dangerous issue in societies like ours where there is a majority of children and teenagers in our population, who are easily impressionable.
    • For that and other more reasons, I’ll tell you in the next paragraph if and why should songs with violent lyrics and topics should be banned.
    • First of all, I know that this happens in ALL COUNTRIES, well, most of them, right?
    • But in this case I’ll talk about mine, Chile, because it is the reality that I know better.
  • Topics like this are common in Hip Hop, Trap, and Reggaeton.
    • (Also Brazilian Funk, but there are not many famous songs in my country and people here actually don’t listen to that, so I’ll omit it).
    • At the moment, EVERYONE has access to Internet, so, it’s easy to be logged in apps like Tik Tok, Youtube, Facebook, Twitter, etc etc etc. On those social media apps is where songs and videos are quickly widespread so anybody can see it and share it multiplied times.
    • Here we realize that there is no real age restriction for content visualizing, and with this I want to say that, kids and teenagers just click on the like button without being (in most of the cases) actually conscious of what they watch.
    • The problem in Chilean society and system, is the education we have received, we have to change it, and make that the other generations are taught under a feminist, anti-patriarchy perspective, with awareness of and power on our bodies, to stop and decrease rapes, sexual abuse, grooming, pedophilia, inter alia.
    • Back to the main topic, the virality of Marcianeke, Standly, Pailita, El Jordan 23, and thousands of other singers and songs of Chilean Reggaeton has provoked a phenomenon of normalization of behaviors like confrontation and violence, killing, unfaithfulness in relationships, relationships based in sexual satisfaction, drug addiction and bohemian life, among other topics that we have to eradicate.
    • Along with the previously mentioned, I think that DEFINITELY this type of songs and other ones that talk about femicide, necro and other paraphilias, in other musical genres should be banned, but NOW.

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  • câu 1
    • Nowadays, we are living in the era of the hypersexualizing, romanticization of criminality and drug trafficking, which is seen as a symbol of power and status in some communities.
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    • Nowadays, we are living in the era of the hypersexualizing, romanticization of criminality and drug trafficking, which is seen as a symbol of power and status in some communities.
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    • At the same time, that is a serious and dangerous issue in societies like ours where there is a majority of children and teenagers in our population, who are easily impressionable.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • At the same time, thatis is a serious and dangerous issue in societies like ours where there is a majority of children and teenagers in our population, who are easily impressionable.
    • At the same time, that is aese are serious and dangerous issues in societies like ours where there is an impressionable majority of children and teenagers in our population, who are easily impressionable.
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  • câu 3
    • For that and other more reasons, I’ll tell you in the next paragraph if and why should songs with violent lyrics and topics should be banned.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • For that and other more reasons, I’ll tell you in the next paragraph if and why should songs with violent lyrics and topics should be banned.
    • For that and other more reasons, I’ll tell you in the next paragraph if and why shouldit follows that songs with violent lyrics and topics should be banned.
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    • (Also Brazilian Funk, but there are not many famous songs in my country and people here actually don’t listen to that, so I’ll omit it).
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • (AlsoIt is also the case for Brazilian Funk, but there are not many famous songs in my country and people here actually don’t listen to that, so I’ll omit it).
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  • câu 8
    • At the moment, EVERYONE has access to Internet, so, it’s easy to be logged in apps like Tik Tok, Youtube, Facebook, Twitter, etc etc etc. On those social media apps is where songs and videos are quickly widespread so anybody can see it and share it multiplied times.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • At the moment, EVERYONE has access to Internet, so, it's easy to be logged in apps like Tik Tok, YoutTube, Facebook, Twitter, etc etc etc. O. Songs and videos on those social media apps is where songs and videos are quickly widespread so. This allows anybody canto see it and share it multiplied times.
    • At the moment, EVERYONE has access to Internet, so, it's easy to be logged into apps like Tik Tok, YoutTube, Facebook, Twitter, etc etc etc and so on. On those social media apps is where songs and videos are quickly made widespread s. So anybody can see it and share ithem multiplied times.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
    • Here we realize that there is no real age restriction for content visualizing, and with this I want to say that, kids and teenagers just click on the like button without being (in most of the cases) actually conscious of what they watch.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Here we realize that there is no real age restriction for content visualizing, and with this I want to say that, kids and teenagers just click on the like button without being (in most of the cases) actually conscious of what they watch.
    • Here we realize that there is no real age restriction for content visualizing, and with this I want to say that, kviewing content. Kids and teenagers just click on the "like" button without being (in most of the cases) actually conscious of what they watch.
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  • câu 10
    • The problem in Chilean society and system, is the education we have received, we have to change it, and make that the other generations are taught under a feminist, anti-patriarchy perspective, with awareness of and power on our bodies, to stop and decrease rapes, sexual abuse, grooming, pedophilia, inter alia.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • The problem in Chilean society and system, is the education we have received, w. We have to change it, and make thatsure the other generations are taught under a feminist, anti-patriarchy perspective, with awareness of and power on our bodies, to stop and decrease rapes, sexual abuses, groomings, pedophilia, inter aliaand other related activities.
    • The problem in the Chilean society and system, is the education we have received, w. Ee have to change it, and mak to ensure that the other generations are taught under a feminist, anti-patriarchy perspective, with an awareness of andthe power onf our bodies, to stop and decrease rapes, sexual abuse, grooming, pedophilia, inter aliaamong other thing.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • Back to the main topic, the virality of Marcianeke, Standly, Pailita, El Jordan 23, and thousands of other singers and songs of Chilean Reggaeton has provoked a phenomenon of normalization of behaviors like confrontation and violence, killing, unfaithfulness in relationships, relationships based in sexual satisfaction, drug addiction and bohemian life, among other topics that we have to eradicate.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Back to the main topic, --the virality of Marcianeke, Standly, Pailita, El Jordan 23, and thousands of other singers and songs of Chilean Reggaeton has provoked a phenomenon of normalization of behaviors like confrontation and violence, killing, unfaithfulness in relationships, relationships based in sexual satisfaction, drug addiction and bohemian life, among other topics that we have to eradicate.
    • Back to the main topicFor example, the virality of Marcianeke, Standly, Pailita, El Jordan 23, and thousands of other singers and songs of Chilean Reggaeton has provoked a phenomenon of normalization of behaviors like confrontation and violence, killing, unfaithfulness in relationships, relationships based in sexual satisfaction, drug addiction and bohemian life, among other topic - behaviors that we have to eradicate.
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  • câu 12
    • Along with the previously mentioned, I think that DEFINITELY this type of songs and other ones that talk about femicide, necro and other paraphilias, in other musical genres should be banned, but NOW.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Along with the previously mentioned, I think that DEFINITELY thisese types of songs and other ones that talk about femicide, necro and other paraphilias, in other musical genres should be banned, but NOW. ¶
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    • Along with the previously mentioned, I think thatl up, I DEFINITELY thisnk that these types of songs and other ones that talk about femicide, necro and other paraphilias, in otherany sort of musical genres should be banned, but NOW immediately. ¶
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