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  • My name is Polina.
    • Currently, I’m working as a sales representative in an IT company called Tensor that develops software and cloud solutions for business needs such as services for online accounting, CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processes in retail and wholesale.
    • I have been living in Indonesia, Malaysia, and Germany for a while.
    • I lived there not a long time, yet it gave me a lot.
    • Mainly for my personal growth.
    • Experience of living abroad taught me how to operate in multinational teams, improved my soft skills and English proficiency.
    • Aside from my full-time job, I study business administration with a minor in computer science.
    • In a year I’m going to finish my bachelor’s degree.
  • As for my passions and hobbies, I am into photography and outdoor activities.
    • Not a long time ago I explored the Caucus region and South of Russia, and also visited the Republic of Abkhazia with my friend and colleague from my current job.

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    • Currently, I’m working as a sales representative in an IT company called Tensor that develops software and cloud solutions for business needs such as services for online accounting, CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processes in retail and wholesale.
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    • Currently, I’m working as a sales representative inat an IT company called Tensor that. This company develops software and cloud solutions for business needs such as services for online accounting, CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processeoperations in retail and wholesale.
    • Currently, I’mI working as a sales representative inat an IT company called Tensor that develops software and cloud solutions for business needs such as, including services for online accounting, CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processes in the retail and wholesale sectors.
    • Currently, I’m working as a sales representative infor an IT company called Tensor that. This firm develops business software and cloud solutions for business needs such as services forsuch as online accounting services, CRM systems, and programs that optimizeing business processes in retail and wholesale.
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    • I lived there not a long time, yet it gave me a lot.
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    • I lived there not a long time, yet it gave me a lot.didn't live very long in these countries. However, I learned a lot about their customs.
    • IWhile I did not lived in there not a long time, yet it gave me a lotse places for a long period of time, I still gained much from the experience.
    • I lived there notAlthough relatively short, my residence in these varied nations a llong time, yet it gave me a lowed for significant personal development.
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    • Experience of living abroad taught me how to operate in multinational teams, improved my soft skills and English proficiency.
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    • EThe experience of living abroad taught me how to operate in multinational teams, improved my soft skills and English proficiencyas well as developing my interpersonal and English-speaking skills.
    • Experience of lLiving abroad taught me how to operateabout teamwork in multinational teamsettings, improved my soft skills and boosted my English proficiency.
    • Experience of lLiving abroad taught me how to opeintegrate into multinational teams, improved my soft skills and greatly expanded my English proficiency.
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    • Aside from my full-time job, I study business administration with a minor in computer science.
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    • Aside fromIn addition to my full-time job, I studyam enrolled in school where I am majoring in business administration with a minor in computer science.
    • Aside from my full-time job, I study (part time) a bachelor's degree majoring in business administration with a minor in computer science.
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    • Not a long time ago I explored the Caucus region and South of Russia, and also visited the Republic of Abkhazia with my friend and colleague from my current job.
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    • Not a long time ago I explored the Caucus region and Sthe south of Russia,. andI also visited the Republic of Abkhazia with my friend and colleague from my current job.
    • Not a long time agoRecently I explored the Caucus region and Southus and the southern region of Russia, and. I also visited the Republic of Abkhazia with mya friend and colleague from my current job. who is also a colleague at my workplace.
    • Not a long time ago I explored the Caucus region and South of Russia, and also visited the Republic of Abkhazia with my friend and colleague from my current jobRecently, with a colleague and friend from my current position, I have visited the Republic of Abkhazia. I have also explored the Caucusus region and South of Russia.
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