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  • My name is Polina.
    • I was born in Russia and currently, I live in Moscow.
    • I work as a sales representative for an IT company that develops software for business needs such as services for online accounting, CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processes in retail and wholesale.
    • I’m planning to change my job position and start my career in business analysis and start some business on the side in the nearest future.
    • From this entrepreneurship class and from my studies at UoPeople, I’m willing to gain applied knowledge in starting and owning a business.
    • I used to work as a self-employed in video production and in marketing fields.
    • This is quite not the same as owning a real business with officially employed workers that you have to take care of, cash flows to manage, customers to serve, and partners to negotiate.
    • I believe I can be an entrepreneur since I have a good sense of the market, problem-defining and solving skills, organizational experience, understanding of marketing and sales, basic knowledge in accounting.
    • And last but not least I’m ready to take risks and chase opportunities no matter what.
    • As from my experience, not many people are ready to leave their 9 to 5 jobs in order to work 24/7 at the beginning and build their own business.
    • Sometimes it’s simply due to obligations such as mortgage or children and they can’t give up stable income and take financial risks.
    • And some people just want to do something cool for a while and then resting for the rest of their days.
    • As for me, I understand that it takes time, effort, knowledge, and patience to start a business from scratch and operate it in accordance with market needs, and your own values.

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    • I work as a sales representative for an IT company that develops software for business needs such as services for online accounting, CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processes in retail and wholesale.
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    • I work as a sales representative for an IT company that develops software for business needs such as services for online accounting, and CRM systems, and programs that optimize business processes in in order to optimize operations in the retail and wholesale industries.
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    • I’m planning to change my job position and start my career in business analysis and start some business on the side in the nearest future.
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    • I’m planning to change my job positioncareer and start my careeranew in business analysis and start someven have my own separate business on the side in the nearest future.
    • I’m planning to change my job positionjobs and start mya career inas a business analysis and start some businesst as well as start my own the side in the nearest futurebusiness.
    • I am planning to change my job position and start my, commence a career in business analysis and, additionally, start somea business on the side in the nearest future.
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  • Sentence 5
    • From this entrepreneurship class and from my studies at UoPeople, I’m willing to gain applied knowledge in starting and owning a business.
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    • From thisAfter I complete my entrepreneurship class and fromourse and my studies at UoPeople, I’m willing to gain applied intend to gain practical knowledge in starting and ownperating a business.
    • From thisollowing my entrepreneurship class and from myourse and studies at UoPeople, I’m willingsh to gain applied knowledge in starting and owning a business.
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    • This is quite not the same as owning a real business with officially employed workers that you have to take care of, cash flows to manage, customers to serve, and partners to negotiate.
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    • This is quite not the same as owning a real business with officially employed workers that you have to take care oftypical company with formally employed workers, cash flows to manage, customers to serve, and partners to negotiate with .
    • This is quite not the same asdiffers from owning a real business with officially employed workers that you have to take care offormal employees, cash flows to manage, customers to serve, and partners with who to negotiate.
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    • I believe I can be an entrepreneur since I have a good sense of the market, problem-defining and solving skills, organizational experience, understanding of marketing and sales, basic knowledge in accounting.
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    • I believe I can be an entrepreneur since I have a good senseunderstanding of the market, ptroublem-defining and solvshooting skills, organizational experience, understanding of marketing and sales,and basic knowledge in accounting.
    • I believe I can be anwill be a successful entrepreneur since I have a good sense of then excellent understanding of market,s and problem-defining and solving resolution skills, organizational experience, understanding of marketing and sales, - all of which are combined with a basic knowledge in accounting.
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    • As from my experience, not many people are ready to leave their 9 to 5 jobs in order to work 24/7 at the beginning and build their own business.
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    • As from my experienceBased on my observations, not many people are readywilling to leave their 9 to 5 jobs in order to work 24/7 at the beginning andto build their own businesses.
    • As fFrom my personal experience, not manyfew people are readybrave enough to leave their 9 to 5 jobs in order to work the 24/7 at the beginning andessential for building their own business.
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    • Sometimes it’s simply due to obligations such as mortgage or children and they can’t give up stable income and take financial risks.
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    • SomeOftentimes it’s simply due to obligations such as mortgages or children and t. They can’t give upafford to sacrifice their stable incomes and take financial risks.
    • Sometimes it’s simply due to oObligations such as mortgage or children and they can’t give up stable income andre sometimes the reasons why such people require a stable income and are unable or unwilling to take financial risks.
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    • And some people just want to do something cool for a while and then resting for the rest of their days.
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    • And some peopleOthers just want to do something cool for a while and then resting forsimple until they rest of their daystire.
    • And some people just want to do something cool for a while andOthers simply want easy and risk-free employment up to thenir resting for the rest of their daysrement.
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    • As for me, I understand that it takes time, effort, knowledge, and patience to start a business from scratch and operate it in accordance with market needs, and your own values.
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    • As for me, I understand that it takes time, effort, knowledg expertise, and patience to start a business from scratch and operatetailor it in accordance with market needs, and your own values. ¶
    • As for me, IHowever, I personally understand that it takes time, effort, knowledge, and patience to start a business from scratch and operate it in accordance with market needs, - and your own values. ¶
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