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BANTU BUAT PEMBETULAN SEKARANG!Dibetulkan

Teks daripada olga_vavul - English

  • CAE essay

  • What is more important: to prevent or treat diseases?
    • That is the tough question facing our authorities.
    • A recent TV debate on the issue of whether sports and recreation charities or health charities should receive funding couldn’t reach a consensus.
  • However, it should be possible to find a solution.
    • What we are going to do first is analyze why it’s so crucial to support sport and recreation charities.
    • Firstly, we need to take into consideration that the more hectic pace of life is, the more people feel exhausted and constantly seek ways to recharge their batteries.
    • Secondly, the prices for commercial fitness and entertaining services have been skyrocketing for the past several years.
    • Based on the mentioned factors, it’s getting obvious that the government should be concerned about providing investments for organizations, which address their free-of-charge services to keep the population in a decent physical and mental condition.
    • On the other side of the scales, we’ve got health charities, which do their best to tackle already existed health issues.
    • Cancer, genetic and hereditary diseases, traumas, etc. There is an almost countless list of terrible diagnoses, which request an enormous amount of energy and money from vulnerable patients, devastated relatives and medical personnel.
    • Meanwhile, charity organizations can make a huge difference.
    • Not only do their volunteers considerably ease the medical procedures and processes of recovery and rehabilitation, but their fonds can also cover prohibitively expensive drugs, surgeries and prosthetic devices for invalids.
    • Taking into account all the factors, we can conclude that both directions are worth to be invested.
    • However, my strong recommendation would be to finance health charities since their mission is to deal with life-and-death matters, whereas sports and recreation activities are only preventive measures.

MOHON BANTU UNTUK BETULKAN SETIAP AYAT! - English

  • Title
  • Ayat 1
  • Ayat 2
    • That is the tough question facing our authorities.
      Undi sekarang!
    • That is the tough question facing our authorities.

      That is the rough question facing our government/medical system.¶

      (authorities makes me think police)
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    • That is the toughdifficult question facing our authorities.¶

      NOTE: "authorities" is technically okay, but as Dave points out, it conveys a sense of law enforcement. Maybe better to express your statement like this:¶

      That is the difficult       question facing our medical authorities.

      OR¶

      That is the difficult question facing our government.¶


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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2
  • Ayat 3
    • A recent TV debate on the issue of whether sports and recreation charities or health charities should receive funding couldn’t reach a consensus.
      Undi sekarang!
    • A recent TV debate on the issue of whether sports and recreation charities or health charities should receive funding couldn’t reach a consensus.

      A recent TV debate on the issue of wether either sports and recreation or health charities should receive funding couldn't reach a consensus.
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    • A recent TVtelevised debate on the issue of whether sports and recreation charities or health charities should receive funding couldn’tfailed to reach a consensus.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 3TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 3
  • Ayat 4
  • Ayat 5
  • Ayat 6
    • Firstly, we need to take into consideration that the more hectic pace of life is, the more people feel exhausted and constantly seek ways to recharge their batteries.
      Undi sekarang!
    • Firstly, we need to take into consideration that the more hectic pace of life is, the more people feel exhausted and constantly seek ways to recharge their batteries.

      Firstly, we need to take into consideration that the more hectic our pace of life is, the more people feel feel exhausted and constantly seek ways to recharge their batteries.
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    • Firstly, we need to take into consideration that the more hectic their pace of life is, the more people feel exhausted and constantly seek ways to recharge their batteries.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 6TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 6
  • Ayat 7
  • Ayat 8
    • Based on the mentioned factors, it’s getting obvious that the government should be concerned about providing investments for organizations, which address their free-of-charge services to keep the population in a decent physical and mental condition.
      Undi sekarang!
    • Based on the mentioned factors, it’s getting obvious that the government should be concerned about providing investments for organizations, which address their free-of-charge services to keep the population in a decent physical and mental condition.

      Based on the aforementioned factors, it’s becoming obvious that the government should be concerned about providing investments for organizations, which provide free services to keep the population in a decent physical and mental condition.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 8TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 8
  • Ayat 9
    • On the other side of the scales, we’ve got health charities, which do their best to tackle already existed health issues.
      Undi sekarang!
    • On the other side of the scales, we’ve got health charities, which do their best to tackle already existed health issues.

      On the other side of the scale we’ve got health charities which do their best to tackle already existing health issues.
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    • On the other side of the scales, we’ve got are health charities, which do their best to tackle already existeding health issues.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 9TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 9
  • Ayat 10
    • Cancer, genetic and hereditary diseases, traumas, etc. There is an almost countless list of terrible diagnoses, which request an enormous amount of energy and money from vulnerable patients, devastated relatives and medical personnel.
      Undi sekarang!
    • Cancer, genetic and hereditary diseases, traumas, etc. There is an almost countless list of terrible diagnoses, which request an enormous amount of energy and money from vulnerable patients, devastated relatives and medical personnel.

      TRAUMATA is the plural of trauma
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    • Cancer, genetic and hereditary diseases, traumas, etc. There is an almost countless nearly unlimited list of terrible diagnoses, which requestdemand an enormous amount of energy and money from vulnerablefrom and spending by patients, devastated relatives and medical personnel.

      NOTE: Plural of "trauma" is (1) TRAUMAS or (2) TRAUMATA. In standard, everyday usage, most people will use "TRAUMAS" ... not "TRAUMATA", which is regarded as pedantic and increasingly obsolete.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 10TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 10
  • Ayat 11
  • Ayat 12
    • Not only do their volunteers considerably ease the medical procedures and processes of recovery and rehabilitation, but their fonds can also cover prohibitively expensive drugs, surgeries and prosthetic devices for invalids.
      Undi sekarang!
    • Not only do their volunteers considerably ease the medical procedures and processes of recovery and rehabilitation, but their founds can also cover prohibitively expensive drugs, surgeries and prosthetic devices for invalids.
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    • Not only do their volunteers considerably ease the medical procedures and processes of recovery and rehabilitation, but their foundsing can also cover the cost of prohibitively expensive drugs, surgeries and prosthetic devices for invalids.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 12TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 12
  • Ayat 13
  • Ayat 14
    • However, my strong recommendation would be to finance health charities since their mission is to deal with life-and-death matters, whereas sports and recreation activities are only preventive measures.
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    • However, myI more strongly recommendation would be to we finance health charities since their mission is to deal with life-and-death matters, whereas sports and recreation activities are only preventive measures. ¶
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 14TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 14