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    • It’s motivation letter. I’d like to know if there are mistakes

    • In general, this last-year failure gave me a great motivation and helped me to come to the conclusion I, in fact, want to have a career in HR field and become Head of HR Department.
    • Only taking this job position, I can affect personnel policy and prevent employment discrimination.
    • Before achieving this level, I will acquire competences in such areas as, Compensation and Benefit, Labor Relations, Performance Management.
    • - GKS is one of the tools that will contribute to my future professionalism.
  • Many Korean companies have achieved success in the international market.
  • Their success also depends on the HR policies because employees are the main asset of any organization.
    • Those people who formed these personnel policies have expertise within the Korean management model.
    • At the same time, in my view, due to historical circumstances HR field in Russia still is not as developed as it is in South Korea.
    • Therefore, thanks to the GKS, I will be able to study the Korean management approach and then apply contemporary practices in Russian conditions.
    • My career goal is to be an HR Manager that, indeed, can affect and change personnel policy.
  • So, obtained master’s degree in South Korea will contribute to my professional and personal growth.

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    • In general, this last-year failure gave me a great motivation and helped me to come to the conclusion I, in fact, want to have a career in HR field and become Head of HR Department.
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    • In general, this last-year's failure gave me a great motivation and helped me to come to the conclusion Iwhich , in fact, i wanted to have a career in HR field and become Head of HR Department.
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    • In general, this last-year failuree difficult year we all underwent during the previous 12 months gave me a great motivation and helped me to come to the conclusion that I, in fact, want to have a career in the HR field and become Head of HR Department.
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    • Before achieving this level, I will acquire competences in such areas as, Compensation and Benefit, Labor Relations, Performance Management.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • Before achieving this level, I will acquire competences in such areas as, C compensation and Bbenefits, Llabor Rrelations, Pperformance Mmanagement.
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    • At the same time, in my view, due to historical circumstances HR field in Russia still is not as developed as it is in South Korea.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • At the same time, in my view, due to historical circumstances the HR field in Russia still is not as developed as it is in South Korea.
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    • PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 8PRIDAJTE NOVÚ OPRAVU! - veta 8
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    • Therefore, thanks to the GKS, I will be able to study the Korean management approach and then apply contemporary practices in Russian conditions.
      Zahlasuj teraz!
    • Therefore, thanks to the GKS, I will be able to study the Korean management approach and then apply contemporary practices into Russian conditions.
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      100% GOOD (1 votes)
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