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    • Scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies.
  • Do you agree or disagree?
    • In the current era, scientific research is conducted not only by the government but also by the private section.
    • While there are many disputes about which of them are proper to accept this responsibility, I completely agree with the given statement on the basis of some rational reasons.
    • To begin with, there are two main reasons why private companies have not sufficient qualifications to accept this delicate responsibility.
    • First and foremost, most of the time scientific projects require adequate time and budget to achieve accurate outcomes with high-quality.
    • In other words, corporations might tend to manipulate results in order to maximize profits when they inadequate access to time and qualified employees.
    • Take a company that produces sensitive medicine as an obvious example; that may introduce a new drug it may commence hurriedly before detailed reviews on this new product.
  • The early announcement of new products can create a variety of difficulties for patients who trust the new medicine.
  • Last but not least, a number of corporations, without having enough investigation might enter vulnerable fields such as GM foods and genetic engineering which could have detrimental consequences either for society or nature.
  • Furthermore, the government is able to dedicate sufficient finances to provide proper assistance for scientific research.
    • Firstly, when scientific research is supported by the government, it may reach the highest standards in the university departments.
    • Simply put, this research may have high-quality that is benefits society rather than concentration solely on competitive advantages or achieving financial returns.
    • The confirmed result could overspread throughout the globe, particularly among the valid academic community.
    • Secondly, governments could invest in beneficial specific fields such as renewable energy that are useful not only for academic subjects but also for addressing the needs of society.
  • Thus, if valuable academic surveys are managed by administrations, they are more likely to positively influence the community.
  • In conclusion, I personally strongly agree that the government should accept sole responsibility for scientific investigations.

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    • In the current era, scientific research is conducted not only by the government but also by the private section.
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    • In the current era, scientific research is conducted not only by the government but also by the private sectionor.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 3
  • 문장 4
    • While there are many disputes about which of them are proper to accept this responsibility, I completely agree with the given statement on the basis of some rational reasons.
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    • While there are many disputes about which of them aresector, government or corporate, is proper to accept this responsibility, I completely agree with the given statement on the basis of some rational reasons.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 4
  • 문장 5
    • To begin with, there are two main reasons why private companies have not sufficient qualifications to accept this delicate responsibility.
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    • To begin with, there are two main reasons why private companies do not have not sufficient qualifications to accept this delicate responsibility.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5
  • 문장 6
    • First and foremost, most of the time scientific projects require adequate time and budget to achieve accurate outcomes with high-quality.
      투표하세요!
    • First and foremost, most of the time scientific projects require adequate time and budget to achieve accurate outcomes with high- quality.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6
  • 문장 7
    • In other words, corporations might tend to manipulate results in order to maximize profits when they inadequate access to time and qualified employees.
      투표하세요!
    • In other words, corporations might tend to manipulate results in order to maximize profits when they have inadequate access to time and qualified employees.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7
  • 문장 8
    • Take a company that produces sensitive medicine as an obvious example; that may introduce a new drug it may commence hurriedly before detailed reviews on this new product.
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    • Take a company that produces sensitive medicine as an obvious example; that company may introduce a new drug it may commencebut do so hurriedly before detailed reviews on this new product.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8
  • 문장 9
    • The early announcement of new products can create a variety of difficulties for patients who trust the new medicine.
      투표하세요!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 9
  • 문장 10
    • Last but not least, a number of corporations, without having enough investigation might enter vulnerable fields such as GM foods and genetic engineering which could have detrimental consequences either for society or nature.
      투표하세요!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 10
  • 문장 11
    • Furthermore, the government is able to dedicate sufficient finances to provide proper assistance for scientific research.
      투표하세요!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 11
  • 문장 12
    • Firstly, when scientific research is supported by the government, it may reach the highest standards in the university departments.
      투표하세요!
    • Firstly, wWhen scientific research is supported by the government, it may reach the highest standards in the university departments.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 12
  • 문장 13
    • Simply put, this research may have high-quality that is benefits society rather than concentration solely on competitive advantages or achieving financial returns.
      투표하세요!
    • Simply put, this research may have high- quality that is benefits society rather than concentrationg solely on competitive advantages or achieving financial returns.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 13
  • 문장 14
    • The confirmed result could overspread throughout the globe, particularly among the valid academic community.
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    • The confirmed result could overspread throughout the globe, particularly among the valid academic community which has strong credibility.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 14
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    • Secondly, governments could invest in beneficial specific fields such as renewable energy that are useful not only for academic subjects but also for addressing the needs of society.
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    • Secondly, gGovernments could also invest in beneficial specific fields such as renewable energy that are useful not only for academic subjects but also for addressing the needs of society.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 15
  • 문장 16
    • Thus, if valuable academic surveys are managed by administrations, they are more likely to positively influence the community.
      투표하세요!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 16ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 16
  • 문장 17
    • In conclusion, I personally strongly agree that the government should accept sole responsibility for scientific investigations.
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    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 17ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 17