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    • What would you do if you won or inherited 1.000.000. dollars?

  • Hi!
    • I’m Nastya and now I’m taking an English course, where we were given the task to write an essay on the topic “What would you do if you won or inherited 1.000.000. dollars?” and put it on the site for checking by native speakers.
    • So what do I do if I win $ 1,000,000?
    • First of all, I will put some of the money into the account to ensure a quiet old age for my parents.
    • For we all know the prices of medicines, doctors’ appointments and care.
    • Then I’ll buy an apartment for myself and my brother, so that I never bother about housing again.
    • Moreover, I do not strive for some kind of extraordinary luxury, no, the main thing is that they are in a good quiet area, with quality kindergartens and schools, with a good environment.
    • I would like our children to grow up in a slightly different world than we do.
    • So that we, in our turn, never feel poverty, hunger, unemployment, unlike our parents, who found these charms of the 90s.
    • Certainly, some of the money will be deposited in the accounts of different banks, some will be invested in stocks and securities.
    • I don’t know about others, but lately I have such troubles that when I receive a certain amount of money, I don’t want to waste it or spend it on whatever my heart desires, no, I want to keep it to the maximum, set aside so that there is always a reserve just in case.
    • Surely, a large amount of money will go to animal shelters and orphanages.
    • But here, of course, it is important that the funds go specifically to the needs of children and animals, and not to the pockets of the leadership.
    • It is important to help the defenseless, abandoned and devoted, those who cannot protect themselves.
    • I would gladly take all the children and animals for myself, but of course this is unrealistic.
    • Some of the money will go to proven charities and anti-violence foundations.
    • I believe that it is important to invest in such projects so that as many people as possible can survive and bring some of their warmth into this world, changing it for the better.
    • Who knows, what if that little girl who can be saved from cancer will later become a famous scientist, and the boy who is pulled out and the atmosphere of violence in the future will adopt the best and honest laws.
  • I would like to help those who need help as much as possible, but since I do not have sufficient resources of warmth and emotional support, I would choose the financial path.
    • At the same time, I would like to invest in the fight for the ecology and preservation of the flora and fauna of our wonderful Earth.
  • Overall, it is also a contribution to my own future and to the future of my children.
    • I want to breathe clean air, never again to see news about forest fires that kill all living things, about poaching and the disappearance of another species of animals or plants.
    • I really want to make this world a better place, and, of course, I understand that financial assistance can look ridiculous, pretentious, for show, but in some issues, for example, health, money is the best support.
    • Yes, it is important to support people morally, but how far will we go with this support if we need an urgent operation that cannot be paid for with faith in the best.
    • You can’t help everyone, but if someone can be saved, it can be considered that life has not been lived in vain.
    • In general, the best thing for me would be the disappearance of violence, homophobia, nationalism, any oppression of other people.
    • I would be happy to live in a wonderful world of love, equality, respect of people for themselves and others.
    • So that politicians of all countries finally come to an agreement and there would never be more wars and terrorist acts.
    • Unfortunately, this cannot be achieved with the help of money, it depends only on the people themselves.

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    • I’m Nastya and now I’m taking an English course, where we were given the task to write an essay on the topic “What would you do if you won or inherited 1.000.000. dollars?” and put it on the site for checking by native speakers.
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    • I’m Nastya and now I’m taking an English course, where we were given the task to write an essay on the topic “What would you do if you won or inherited 1.$1,000.,000. dollars?” and putupload it ton theis site forto get it checkinged by native speakers.
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    • First of all, I will put some of the money into the account to ensure a quiet old age for my parents.
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    • First of all, I will put some of thould deposit some money into themy account to ensure a quiet old agepeaceful retirement for my parents.
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    • Moreover, I do not strive for some kind of extraordinary luxury, no, the main thing is that they are in a good quiet area, with quality kindergartens and schools, with a good environment.
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    • Moreover, I do not strivewish for some kind of extraordinary luxury, no, the main thing is that they ar. On the contrary, I wish to live in a good quiet area, with qualitydecent kindergartens and schools, withand a good environment.
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    • So that we, in our turn, never feel poverty, hunger, unemployment, unlike our parents, who found these charms of the 90s.
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    • So that we, in our turn, never feel never get to experience poverty, hunger, or unemployment in our times, unlike our parents, who founhad experienced these charmordeals of the 90s.
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    • Certainly, some of the money will be deposited in the accounts of different banks, some will be invested in stocks and securities.
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    • Certainly, some of the money will be deposited in the accounts ofI would deposit some money in different banks, some will beand invest somed in stocks and securities.
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    • I don’t know about others, but lately I have such troubles that when I receive a certain amount of money, I don’t want to waste it or spend it on whatever my heart desires, no, I want to keep it to the maximum, set aside so that there is always a reserve just in case.
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    • I don’t know about others, but lately I have suchd troubles that when I receive a certain amount ofspending money. Whenever I receive some money, I don’t want to waste it orby spending it on whatever my heart desires, no. On the contrary, I want to keep it to the maximum, seall; to set it aside, so that there is always a reserveI will always have savings just in case.
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    • But here, of course, it is important that the funds go specifically to the needs of children and animals, and not to the pockets of the leadership.
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    • But herIn this case, of course, it is important that the funds go specifically to the needs of children and animals, and not to the pockets of the leadershipare used to cover the cost of services needed by the children and animals, and that the money do not end up in the pockets of a corrupted administration.
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    • I believe that it is important to invest in such projects so that as many people as possible can survive and bring some of their warmth into this world, changing it for the better.
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    • I believe that it is important to invest in such projects, so that as many people as possible can survive and bring some of their warmth into this world, changing it for the better.
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    • Who knows, what if that little girl who can be saved from cancer will later become a famous scientist, and the boy who is pulled out and the atmosphere of violence in the future will adopt the best and honest laws.
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    • Who knows, what ifether that little girl who can be saved from cancer willould later become a famous scientist, and the boy who is pulled out and the atmosphere of violence in the future will adopt the besor whether that boy taken away from an environment of violence would establish great and honest laws in the future.
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    • I would like to help those who need help as much as possible, but since I do not have sufficient resources of warmth and emotional support, I would choose the financial path.
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    • At the same time, I would like to invest in the fight for the ecology and preservation of the flora and fauna of our wonderful Earth.
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    • At the same time, I would like to invest in the fight forto protect the ecologysystem and to preservation ofe the flora and fauna of our wonderful Earth.
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    • I want to breathe clean air, never again to see news about forest fires that kill all living things, about poaching and the disappearance of another species of animals or plants.
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    • I want to breathe clean air, n. I do not want to see ever again to seeany news about forest wildfires that kill all living things, or news about poaching and the disappearance of another, or news about different species of animals or plants dying out.
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    • I really want to make this world a better place, and, of course, I understand that financial assistance can look ridiculous, pretentious, for show, but in some issues, for example, health, money is the best support.
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    • I really want to make this world a better place, and, of course, I understand that financial assistance can look ridiculous, pretentious, for showand ostentatious, but infor some issues, for example,such as healthcare, money is the best support.
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    • Yes, it is important to support people morally, but how far will we go with this support if we need an urgent operation that cannot be paid for with faith in the best.
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    • Yes, it is important to support people emortionally, but how far will we go with thissuch support if we need an urgent operation thatsurgery, which cannot be paid for witheven by the best faith in the besthumans.
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    • You can’t help everyone, but if someone can be saved, it can be considered that life has not been lived in vain.
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    • You can’t help everyone, but if someoneyou can be saved, it can be considered that just one person, then your life has not been lived in vain.
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    • In general, the best thing for me would be the disappearance of violence, homophobia, nationalism, any oppression of other people.
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    • In general, the best thing for me would be the disappearance of violence, homophobia, nationalism, anyd any form of oppression of other people.
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    • I would be happy to live in a wonderful world of love, equality, respect of people for themselves and others.
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    • I would be happy to, if I could live in a wonderful world of love, equality, and respect of people for themselves and for others.
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    • So that politicians of all countries finally come to an agreement and there would never be more wars and terrorist acts.
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    • So thate politicians of all countries would finally come to an agreement, and there would never bebe no more wars andnor terrorist acttacks.
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