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    • The nightmare

    • Yesterday, I had the worst nightmare ever in my life.
  • After a long day, I went to sleep and the nightmare began.
    • It was about the disappearance of my family members without any clues.
    • When the woke up, it was a nice day and my sister started to prepare for breakfast.
    • My mother and my little brother went to the market to buy the meal for us but different from the other day, today they spent more time to go.
    • I and my sister waited for them over 30 minutes but we can't know when will they return.
    • After we have been waiting for an hour, my sister and I went to the market to make sure how are they because we were so worried.
    • When we check all the markets, we didn't see them and then my sister gave me the money to buy breakfast and she returned back home.
    • There's also my dad at home so I don't need to worry about my sister because my dad is very strong and muscular.
    • After I bought breakfast, I turned back home and then there was a story.
    • When I looked at my mobile phone, there is a sentence so I came closer and closer, and then it said: "My son, my son !!!".
    • At that time, I ran upstairs and said: "help, help" but my dad wasn't in his room so I run to the roof and found my sister, but she wasn't there, at that time, all my neighborhood disappear in a mysterious way.
    • When I woke up, it was 7:00 A.M and I realized how important my family is.

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    • It was about the disappearance of my family members without any clues.
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    • It was about the disappearance of my family members without any clues.

      NOTE: Your sentence is good, but maybe a bit more impacting if put this way:¶

      It was about the mysterious disappearance of my family without a trace of evidence as to where or why.
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    • My mother and my little brother went to the market to buy the meal for us but different from the other day, today they spent more time to go.
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    • My mother and my little (younger) brother went to the market to buy the mealfood for us but different fromunlike the other day, today they spent more time to gohey took longer today (this time).
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    • I and my sister waited for them over 30 minutes but we can't know when will they return.
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    • I and my sisterMy sister and I, not knowing when they were going to return, waited for them for over 30 minutes but we can't know when will they return.
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    • After we have been waiting for an hour, my sister and I went to the market to make sure how are they because we were so worried.
      투표하세요!
    • After we have been waiting for'd waited an hour, my sister and I went to the market to make sure how are they because we were so worried.became concerned and so we went to the market to check on them, to make sure they were okay.
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    • When we check all the markets, we didn't see them and then my sister gave me the money to buy breakfast and she returned back home.
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    • When we check all the markets, we didn't see them andt then market, so my sister gave me the money to buy breakfast and she returned (went back) home.
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    • There's also my dad at home so I don't need to worry about my sister because my dad is very strong and muscular.
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    • There's also my dad at home so I doidn't need to worry about my sister because my dad is very strong and muscular.ing home alone because our father, who is muscular and very strong, was home.
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    • After I bought breakfast, I turned back home and then there was a story.
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    • After I bought breakfast, I turned back home and then there was a story and was returning home something happened, an incident I will now describe.
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    • When I looked at my mobile phone, there is a sentence so I came closer and closer, and then it said: "My son, my son !!!".
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    • When I looked at my mobile phone, there is a sentence so I came closer and closer, and then it said:ile on the way home I looked at my phone and saw a message that read "My son, my son !!!".
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    • At that time, I ran upstairs and said: "help, help" but my dad wasn't in his room so I run to the roof and found my sister, but she wasn't there, at that time, all my neighborhood disappear in a mysterious way.
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    • At that time, I ran upstairs and said:cried "hHelp, help"!", but my dad wasn't in his room, so I ruan to the roof and found my sister, but she wasn't there, at that time, all my neighborhood disappear in a mysterious wayto find ; in fact my entire neighborhood had mysteriously disappeared.
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