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    • With this letter, I am applying for a position in the master of science in water resources engineering, offered at interuniversity programme of the Vrije Universiteit Brussel (VUB) and KU Leuven.
    • With my current experience as an environmental engineering, I wish to expand my technical knowledge of manage fresh water resources and turn my focus towards safeguard the water needs for future generations and make better decisions to save the water.
    • I would like to develop new techniques to improve local policies for water management.
    • By reading the course curriculum available online, I have found that the subject material covered will best suit my career goals.
    • Lastly, the prospect of participating in a mandatory exchange program is an excellent way to observe divergent information systems, as well as build upon my cultural cognizance.
    • First of all, in Chile the water is not public and it is in hands of private companies.
    • Furthermore, we need to pay high prices to get water and the after treatment of waste water.
    • In these companies are common that they don’t have good policy to ensure the water, on top of that, they have water rights forever and a poor treatment for the waste water.
    • The purpose to study this master is because I want to better my understanding water resources engineering, improve in water management, and to learn how to contribute to change this old policy and how we implemented new and good policies to lower the water scarcity that we live around the world.
    • Secondly, I specialize in circular economy projects and provide decision support solutions to large and little scale.
    • As part of my role I liaise with clients regarding their environmental management objectives for the companies, create and update solutions to capture their behaviors, assist with technical data quality management, produces insightful reports.
    • I also was financed by the Production Fomenting Corporation – CORFO of Chilean government to development a prototype of water distiller based on obsolete electric kettles, project 19SEC-112562 of the "Join the Circular Economy" fund.
  • Additionally, as it is a small company, my role often demands that I gather primary data from academic papers, adapting content and converting them into real market practices.
    • My responsibility, diligence and management aptitude were integral to the role; however, it was clear that my progress was decelerated by my lack of technical, specifically in waters resources engineering training.
    • I graduated with a Bachelor of Environmental Engineer from Universidad Técnica Federico Santa María in Chile.
    • During my degree, I was very active in many facets of university life.
    • I was directive member of the first center of students of environmental engineering career, I was member of the team sport of tennis of the university, furthermore, I was highly committed to the development of a university tennis club for women.
    • Taking over the tennis committee in my first semester I had plans on developing the club to be a self-sustaining, award-winning, and socially interactive club.
    • Forming a committee of women’s tennis enthusiasts, our club achieved all of the aforementioned goals within the duration of my degree and were awarded numerous accolades.
    • Lastly, with all of the responsibilities at hand, I remained vigilant with my academic performance and the university gave me a diploma for my outstanding sports career, listed in my up-to-date resume.
    • On the other hands I organize the congress of confederation of environmental science students in 2014.
    • Further to this, in 2013 I remained engaged in university affairs by working volunteering in a sustainable work program in Mapuche communities from the south of my country.
    • In this program, my duties varied from made a native reforestation to reach more variety of trees that existed in the zone, until teach composting to the students of the rural school where we were staying.
    • Currently I actively participate in the association of women in engineering, where we seek to generate a network of contacts at the national level and also strengthen our professional skills along with making visible the outstanding women at the national level in engineering.
    • My ambition to study in Belgium stems from a dearth of equivalent professional programs offered in Chile.
  • As mentioned earlier, the future of water in Chile will demand a workforce with a specialized skillset.
    • With this degree I would like to meet this demand and, in the future, be a pioneer develop, management and protection of water resources.
    • Furthermore, Belgium geographic location and current economic strength attract industry experts from around the world.
    • With the notion of idea-sharing in mind, this would be a perfect ground to establish the next step of my professional career.
    • With all of my experience listed, I am in search of bringing my career to the next level.
  • The subjects offered in this program are specifically in line with my professional goals.

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  • câu 1
    • With this letter, I am applying for a position in the master of science in water resources engineering, offered at interuniversity programme of the Vrije Universiteit Brussel (VUB) and KU Leuven.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • With this letter, I amI am writing to applying for a position in the mMaster of sScience in wthe Water rResources eEngineering course, offered at iInteruniversity programme of the Vrije Universiteit Brussel (VUB) and KU Leuven.
    • WI writhe this letter, I am to applying for a position in the master of science in water resources engineering, offered at interuniversity programme of the Vrije Universiteit Brussel (VUB) and KU Leuven.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1
  • câu 2
    • With my current experience as an environmental engineering, I wish to expand my technical knowledge of manage fresh water resources and turn my focus towards safeguard the water needs for future generations and make better decisions to save the water.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • With my current experience as an environmental engineering, I wish to expand my technical knowledge of manageing fresh water resources and turn my focus towards safeguarding the water needs ofor future generations and, makeing better decisions to save the water.
    • With my current experience as an environmental engineering, I wish to expand my technical knowledge of manage fresh water resources and turn my focus towards safeguarding the water needs for future generations and make better decisions to save the water.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
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    • By reading the course curriculum available online, I have found that the subject material covered will best suit my career goals.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • By reading the course curriculum available online, I have foundbelieve that the subject material covered will best suit my career goals.
    • By reading the course curriculum available online, I have foundthink that the subject material covered will best suit my career goals.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
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    • Lastly, the prospect of participating in a mandatory exchange program is an excellent way to observe divergent information systems, as well as build upon my cultural cognizance.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Lastly, the prospect of participating in a mandatory exchange program is an excellent way to observe divergent information systems, as well as build upon my cultural cognizanceunderstanding.
    • Lastly, the prospect of participating in a mandatory exchange program is an excellent way to observe divergent information systems, as well as build upon my cultural cognizanceawareness.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
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    • In these companies are common that they don’t have good policy to ensure the water, on top of that, they have water rights forever and a poor treatment for the waste water.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • InVery few of these companies are common that they don’t have goodhave adequate policyies to ensure the water, o is safe. On top of that, they have water rights forever and a poor treatment for thedo not treat waste water well.
    • In these companies are common that they don’t have a good policy to ensure the water, on top of that, they have water rights forever and a poor treatment for the waste water.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
    • The purpose to study this master is because I want to better my understanding water resources engineering, improve in water management, and to learn how to contribute to change this old policy and how we implemented new and good policies to lower the water scarcity that we live around the world.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • The purposereason I want to study for this mMasters is because I want to better my understanding water resources engineering, improve in water management, and to learn how to contribute to changeing this old policy and. I also want to learn about how we can implemented new and goodbetter policies to lower the rate of water scarcity that we live around the world.
    • The purpose to study this master is because I want to better my understanding of water resources engineering, improve in water management, and to learn how to contribute to change this old policy and how we implemented new and good policies to lower the water scarcity that we live in around the world.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9
  • câu 10
    • Secondly, I specialize in circular economy projects and provide decision support solutions to large and little scale.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Secondly, I specialize in circular economy projects and provide decision support solutions to large and little scale enterprises.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • As part of my role I liaise with clients regarding their environmental management objectives for the companies, create and update solutions to capture their behaviors, assist with technical data quality management, produces insightful reports.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • As part of my role, I liaise with clients regarding their environmental management objectives for the companies, create and update solutions to capture their behaviours, assist with technical data quality management, and produces insightful reports.
    • As part of my role I liaise with clients regarding their environmental management objectives for the companies, create and update solutions to capture their behaviors, assist with technical data quality management, produces insightful reports.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
    • I also was financed by the Production Fomenting Corporation – CORFO of Chilean government to development a prototype of water distiller based on obsolete electric kettles, project 19SEC-112562 of the "Join the Circular Economy" fund.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I also was financed by the Production Fomenting Corporation (CORFO of), part of the Chilean government, to development a prototype of a water distiller based on obsolete electric kettles,. This is project 19SEC-112562 of the "Join the Circular Economy" fund.
    • I also was financed by the Production Fomenting Corporation – CORFO of the Chilean government to development a prototype of a water distiller based on obsolete electric kettles, project 19SEC-112562 of the "Join the Circular Economy" fund.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
    • Additionally, as it is a small company, my role often demands that I gather primary data from academic papers, adapting content and converting them into real market practices.
      100% GOOD (2 votes)
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13
  • câu 14
    • My responsibility, diligence and management aptitude were integral to the role; however, it was clear that my progress was decelerated by my lack of technical, specifically in waters resources engineering training.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • My responsibility, diligence and management aptitudeskills were integral to the role; however, it was clear that my progress was decelerahalted by my lack of technical know-how, specifically in waters resources engineering training.
    • My responsibility, is to diligence and management aptitude were integral to the role; however, it was clear that my progress was decelerated by my lack of technical, specifically in waters resources engineering training.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
  • câu 15
    • I graduated with a Bachelor of Environmental Engineer from Universidad Técnica Federico Santa María in Chile.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I graduated with a Bachelor of Environmental Engineering from Universidad Técnica Federico Santa María in Chile.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15
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    • I was directive member of the first center of students of environmental engineering career, I was member of the team sport of tennis of the university, furthermore, I was highly committed to the development of a university tennis club for women.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I was directive member of the first cCenter of sStudents of efor students studying Environmental eEngineering career,. I was a member of the team sport of tennis of the university, fUniversity's tennis team. Furthermore, I was highly committed to the development of a university tennis club for women at the University.
    • I was a directive member of the first center of students of an environmental engineering career, I was a member of the team sport of tennis of the university, furthermore, I was highly committed to the development of a university tennis club for women.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17
  • câu 18
    • Taking over the tennis committee in my first semester I had plans on developing the club to be a self-sustaining, award-winning, and socially interactive club.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
    • Taking over the tennis committee in my first semester I had plans ton developing the club to be a self-sustaining, award-winning, and socially interactive club.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18
  • câu 19
    • Forming a committee of women’s tennis enthusiasts, our club achieved all of the aforementioned goals within the duration of my degree and were awarded numerous accolades.
      100% GOOD (2 votes)
    • Forming a committee of women’s tennis enthusiasts, our club achieved all of the aforementioned goals within the duration of my degree and wereas awarded numerous accolades.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19
  • câu 20
    • Lastly, with all of the responsibilities at hand, I remained vigilant with my academic performance and the university gave me a diploma for my outstanding sports career, listed in my up-to-date resume.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Lastly, with all of the responsibilities at hand, I remained vigilant with my academic performance never slipped and the university gave me a diploman award for my outstanding sports career, listed in my up-to-date resumeCV.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20
  • câu 21
    • On the other hands I organize the congress of confederation of environmental science students in 2014.
      100% GOOD (1 votes)
    • On the other hands II also organized the cCongress of cConfederation of eEnvironmental sScience students in 2014.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 21ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 21
  • câu 22
    • Further to this, in 2013 I remained engaged in university affairs by working volunteering in a sustainable work program in Mapuche communities from the south of my country.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Further toAs well as this, in 2013, I remained engaged in university affairs by working volunteering in a sustainable work programme in Mapuche communities fromin the south of my countryChile.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 22ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 22
  • câu 23
    • In this program, my duties varied from made a native reforestation to reach more variety of trees that existed in the zone, until teach composting to the students of the rural school where we were staying.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • In this programme, my duties varied from madecreating a native reforestation scheme to reach moreieve a greater variety of trees that existed in the zone, until teacharea. I also taught composting to the students ofat the rural school where we were staying.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 23ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 23
  • câu 24
    • Currently I actively participate in the association of women in engineering, where we seek to generate a network of contacts at the national level and also strengthen our professional skills along with making visible the outstanding women at the national level in engineering.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Currently, I actively participate in the aAssociation of wWomen in eEngineering, where we seek to generate a network of contacts at thea national level and also strengthen our professional skills along with makside giving a visible platform to the outstanding women at thea national level in engineering.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 24ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 24
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    • With this degree I would like to meet this demand and, in the future, be a pioneer develop, management and protection of water resources.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • With this degree I would like to meet this demand and, in the future, be a pioneer in developing, managementing and protection ofng our water resources.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 27ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 27
  • câu 28
    • Furthermore, Belgium geographic location and current economic strength attract industry experts from around the world.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Furthermore, Belgium's geographic location and current economic strength attracts industry experts from around the world.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 28ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 28
  • câu 29
    • With the notion of idea-sharing in mind, this would be a perfect ground to establish the next step of my professional career.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • With the notion of idea-sharing in mind, this would be athe perfect groundplace to establish the next step of my professional career.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 29ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 29
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