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    • Nowadays, a number of governments tend to invest in the art field such as theatre, concert, and gallery.
    • Some believe that spend money in this field just wasting national wealth.
    • However, I accept that spending money to progress quality in public service is necessary and vital but we cannot ignore that a healthy society requires art.
    • On the one hand, there are some reasons why the original budget should be spent on the public services sector such as education, health, and transport for all people, regardless of their income, physical ability and position.
    • First and foremost; if governments want to make a community with a high welfare level they should have support finance of public services projects.
    • To be more precise, financing provision to improve public services not merely making community satisfaction about what they receive in return for their taxes but it also can solve some social problems, (ranging) in various areas from education to health.
    • For example; mortality and disease rates are decreased in countries where governments spend adequate money in the healthcare system.
    • On the other hand, investing for art as a significant parameter may have multiple merits so officials cannot negligible it. each one knows that arts and culture are interrelated so when they put together, they have the ability to generate empathy, stir up dialogue, and inducing reflection hence art can an appropriate indicator for the culture of society.
    • For example, arts like classical music, cinema, and theater not merely can entertain people but they also can introduce precious customs to other nations.
    • Therefore, attractive a lot of tourists all over the world can be possible if the governments pay more attention and having financial support for the arts.
    • Absorbing visitors is an excellent way to improve economic attitude as well as the impact on the native people's livelihood.
    • In conclusion, in my view, spending the amount of the administration's budget to support public services and art has direct and indirect positive impacts on the people's lives.

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    • Nowadays, a number of governments tend to invest in the art field such as theatre, concert, and gallery.
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    • Nowadays, a number ofAt this time, many governments tend toare investing in the art field such as theatre, concert, ands, including such fields as theatre, concert venues, and visual arts galleryies.
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    • However, I accept that spending money to progress quality in public service is necessary and vital but we cannot ignore that a healthy society requires art.
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    • However, I accept that spending money to improgressve quality in public service is necessary and vital but we cannot ignore that a healthy society requires art.
    • However, I accept that spending money to progress quality inWhile I believe that investment in a nation's public services is necessary and vital but we can, we ought not ignore that a healthy society requires arte advancement of the arts, which are also necessary for a healthy society.
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    • On the one hand, there are some reasons why the original budget should be spent on the public services sector such as education, health, and transport for all people, regardless of their income, physical ability and position.
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    • On the one hand, there are some reasons why the original budget should be spent on the public services sector such as education, health, and transport for all people, regardless of their income, physical ability and position.
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  • Sentence 5
    • First and foremost; if governments want to make a community with a high welfare level they should have support finance of public services projects.
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    • First and foremost; if governments want to makcreate a community with a high level of welfare level, they should have support financeing of public services projects.
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  • Sentence 6
    • To be more precise, financing provision to improve public services not merely making community satisfaction about what they receive in return for their taxes but it also can solve some social problems, (ranging) in various areas from education to health.
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    • To be more precise, financing provision to improve public services is not merely making community satisfaction about what they receive in return for their taxes but it also can solve some social problems, (ranging) in various areas from education to health.
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  • Sentence 7
    • For example; mortality and disease rates are decreased in countries where governments spend adequate money in the healthcare system.
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    • For example; mortality and disease rates are decreased in countries where governments spend adequate money in the healthcare system.
    • For example;, mortality and disease rates are decreasedtend to decline in countries where governments spend adequate money in theinvest in universal healthcare systems.
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  • Sentence 8
    • On the other hand, investing for art as a significant parameter may have multiple merits so officials cannot negligible it. each one knows that arts and culture are interrelated so when they put together, they have the ability to generate empathy, stir up dialogue, and inducing reflection hence art can an appropriate indicator for the culture of society.
      Vote now!
    • On the other hand, investing for art as a significant parameter may have multiple merits so officials cannot negligible it. each ect it. Everyone knows that arts and culture are interrelated so when they put togetherare combined, they have the ability to generate empathy, stir up dialogue, and inducing reflection h. Hence art can be an appropriate indicator ofor the culture of society.
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  • Sentence 9
    • For example, arts like classical music, cinema, and theater not merely can entertain people but they also can introduce precious customs to other nations.
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    • For example, arts like classical music, cinema, and theater do not merely can entertain people but they also can introduce preciousshowcase the culture and customs to other nations.
    • For example, such arts likeas classical music, cinema, and theater not merely can entertain people but they also can introduce preconly provide entertainment but share the traditiouns and customs to other nationof a nation with others.
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    • Therefore, attractive a lot of tourists all over the world can be possible if the governments pay more attention and having financial support for the arts.
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    • Therefore, attractiveng a lot of tourists all over the world can be possible if the governments pay more attention and having financially support for the arts.
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  • Sentence 11
    • Absorbing visitors is an excellent way to improve economic attitude as well as the impact on the native people's livelihood.
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    • Absorbing visitors is an excellent way to improve economic attitude as well as the impact on the native people's livelihoodTourism provides jobs for many persons and thus contributes significantly to the improvement of a nation's overall economic "health".
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    • In conclusion, in my view, spending the amount of the administration's budget to support public services and art has direct and indirect positive impacts on the people's lives.
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    • In conclusion, in my view, spending the amount of the adminit is my opinion that the stration's budget to supporte's investments in public services and the arts hasve positive impacts, both direct and indirect, positive impacts on the people's lives. ¶
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