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متن از Maryam1987 - English

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    • Nowadays, a number of governments tend to invest in the art field such as theatre, concert, and gallery.
    • Some believe that spend money in this field just wasting national wealth.
    • However, I accept that spending money to progress quality in public service is necessary and vital but we cannot ignore that a healthy society requires art.
    • On the one hand, there are some reasons why the original budget should be spent on the public services sector such as education, health, and transport for all people, regardless of their income, physical ability and position.
    • First and foremost; if governments want to make a community with a high welfare level they should have support finance of public services projects.
    • To be more precise, financing provision to improve public services not merely making community satisfaction about what they receive in return for their taxes but it also can solve some social problems, (ranging) in various areas from education to health.
    • For example; mortality and disease rates are decreased in countries where governments spend adequate money in the healthcare system.
    • On the other hand, investing for art as a significant parameter may have multiple merits so officials cannot negligible it. each one knows that arts and culture are interrelated so when they put together, they have the ability to generate empathy, stir up dialogue, and inducing reflection hence art can an appropriate indicator for the culture of society.
    • For example, arts like classical music, cinema, and theater not merely can entertain people but they also can introduce precious customs to other nations.
    • Therefore, attractive a lot of tourists all over the world can be possible if the governments pay more attention and having financial support for the arts.
    • Absorbing visitors is an excellent way to improve economic attitude as well as the impact on the native people's livelihood.
    • In conclusion, in my view, spending the amount of the administration's budget to support public services and art has direct and indirect positive impacts on the people's lives.

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