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  • Many processed foods and ready-made meals contain preservatives and chemicals.
    • What are the advantages yo this?
  • Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
    • Note: Leftovers can contaminate the water and soil => decrease the productivity of crops creature which accidentally eats them, may suffer the same as human and even dead=> also lead to pollute environment.
    • Work: Nowadays, there is a fact that many chemicals and preservatives are being used in many processes making foods and man-made meals.
    • This fact has two advantages in product preservation and in attracting people.
    • However, this is also the factor causing bad effects for both human and animal health and pollutes the environment.
    • I strongly agree that the advantages can never overweight the disadvantages.
    • Basically, using preservatives and chemicals in foods and man-made meals is a good way in preserving the foods.
    • By it’s effect decreasing the speed of decomposing chemical reaction, preservatives are being mixed in the making food processes.
    • For instant, a fried chicken wing can still be able to use for longer than 5 days if it’s process has chemicals.
    • The next benefit is the preservative can improve the meal appearance look more tasty.
    • On the other hand, too based on chemicals and preservatives also can result three disadvantages.
    • The first disadvantage is the bad effects for health.
    • People, who usually interacts with the food consist of chemicals, in a short term, they can get sick or stomachache.
  • But how about in a long term?
    • They may suffer from cancer and may dead by the poisoned food.
    • One other bad consequence is increasing the level of polluted environment.
    • The leftovers contaminate rivers and soil, leading to the drop of crop’s productivity.
    • Poisoned leftovers also may accidentally be eaten by animals.
  • These poor creatures suffer from pain and may die.
    • In conclusion, although using chemicals and preservatives in food and man-made processes increases the expiry day of the production and the appearance of the production, it also take responsibility for both people and animals’ health issues and polluted environment.
    • This is a reference for the fact that the disadvantages overweight the advantages.

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    • Note: Leftovers can contaminate the water and soil => decrease the productivity of crops creature which accidentally eats them, may suffer the same as human and even dead=> also lead to pollute environment.
      Voĉdoni nun!
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      LeftoversFood production waste can contaminate the water and soil => decrease the productivity of crops ¶
      creature which accidentally eats them, may suffer the same as human and even dead=> also lead t      . Like humans, livestock that accidentally consume the waste may suffer and even die, leading to decreased productivity. Food production waste can also pollute the environment.
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    • Work: Nowadays, there is a fact that many chemicals and preservatives are being used in many processes making foods and man-made meals.
      Voĉdoni nun!
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      Nowadays,       there is a fact that many chemicals and preservatives are being used in many processes making foods and man-madepre-packaged meals.
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    • However, this is also the factor causing bad effects for both human and animal health and pollutes the environment.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • However, this is also the factor causing badit also has negative effects foron both human and animal health and pollutes the environment.
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    • By it’s effect decreasing the speed of decomposing chemical reaction, preservatives are being mixed in the making food processes.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • By it’s effectPreservatives are being used in the food making process in order to decreasinge the speed of decomposing chemical reaction, preservatives are being mixed in the making food processes.
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    • For instant, a fried chicken wing can still be able to use for longer than 5 days if it’s process has chemicals.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • For instantce, a fried chicken wing can still be able to use for longer than 5 days if it’s process haslast longer than 5 days through treatment with chemicals.
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    • People, who usually interacts with the food consist of chemicals, in a short term, they can get sick or stomachache.
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    • PIn the short term, people, who usually interacts with the food consist of chemicals, in a short term, theyregularly consume chemically treated foods can get sick or develop a stomachache.
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    • The leftovers contaminate rivers and soil, leading to the drop of crop’s productivity.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • The leftovers contaminate rivers and soilFood processing waste contaminates the soil and rivers, leading to thea drop ofin crop’s productivity.
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    • In conclusion, although using chemicals and preservatives in food and man-made processes increases the expiry day of the production and the appearance of the production, it also take responsibility for both people and animals’ health issues and polluted environment.
      Voĉdoni nun!
    • In conclusion, although using chemicals and preservatives in food and man-madeproduction processes increases the expiry dayte of the productionfood and the appearance of the productionfood, it also take responsibilityleads to health issues for both people and animals’ health issue, as well as and polluted environment.
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