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Pesan dari Manonsrz - English

    • The influence of Internet on our way of life

    • To begin with, I would like to point out that today, there is an enthusiasm for sport and for healthy way of life.
    • Indeed, all in life remembers us that physical activity is essential : ads, prevention campaign, social networks...
    • The internet impacts the way that we eat because on Instagram for instance, plenty of influencers says what they eat - especially if it's healthy – and oblige ourselves to improve our diet.
    • It could be a good thing for health but this influence could become harmful too : some young girls fall in anorexia because they are taken in a vicious circle without making the difference between a healthy food and a drastic diet.
    • So, it would be necessary to control more and more the utilisation of Internet, or at least to invest in education with new courses about the Internet's risks.

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    • The internet impacts the way that we eat because on Instagram for instance, plenty of influencers says what they eat - especially if it's healthy – and oblige ourselves to improve our diet.
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    • The internet impacts the way that we eat because on Instagram for instance,. Take for instance, on Instagram; plenty of influencers says what they eat - especially if it's healthy and oblige ourselves toin improveing our diet.
    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 3TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 3
  • Kalimat 4
    • It could be a good thing for health but this influence could become harmful too : some young girls fall in anorexia because they are taken in a vicious circle without making the difference between a healthy food and a drastic diet.
      Pilih sekarang juga!
    • It could be a good thing for health but thisese influences could become harmful too : s. Some young girls faell in anorexia because they are taken in a vicious circle without making the differences between a healthy foods and a drastic diet.s.
    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 4TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 4
  • Kalimat 5
    • So, it would be necessary to control more and more the utilisation of Internet, or at least to invest in education with new courses about the Internet's risks.
      Pilih sekarang juga!
    • So, it would beIn conclusion, it is necessary to control more and more thexcessive utiliszation of Internet (internet addiction), or at least to invest in education with new courses about the Internet's risks.
    • TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 5TAMBAHKAN KOREKSI YANG BARU! - Kalimat 5