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  • Preventing selfishness

    • It is sometimes argued that it should be more rational if parents would limit their kid’s right to make independent decisions to prevent them of being selfish.
    • However, there are those who suppose that such action is an unreasonable restriction of freedom.
    • This essay supports the later view because it is obvious that such kind of limitation will effect badly on social skills of a child in the future.
    • Firstly, this essay will discuss the supposedly roots why youngster become egoists, secondly, it will analyze the reasons why kids should obtain rights to choose.
    • There is an opinion that the main part of those who became an egoists due to lack of necessary parents control in the past.
  • Unfortunately, little do people realize that the situation is diametrically opposite and it is the lack of freedom of choice that makes the individual jealously guard their powers.
    • It is worth noting that this ultimately leads to the fact that the child grows up his eccentric.
    • For example, it has been reported by the World Association of Psychologists that such sort of education is not only useless as a method of preventing egoism, but also is a main reason of it’s appearance.
    • On the other hand, it is obvious that absence of the ability to make own decisions, a child can grow up dependent with low social skills.
    • Moreover, most psychologists consider this kind of the parent’s behavior as one of the types of violence against the child.
  • So, it is not surprisingly that, for instance, according to the report of the same organization, only 8 percent of young respondents expressed a desire to treat their future children the same way as their own parents did.
    • In conclusion, taking into account all written above, I am firmly convinced that any child should be treated as grown-up person and no unreasonable restrictions are allowed.
  • This is because neither is it believed that this could prevent selfishness in kids, nor do it could be trusted that this way of education is safe.

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  • câu 1
    • It is sometimes argued that it should be more rational if parents would limit their kid’s right to make independent decisions to prevent them of being selfish.
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    • It is sometimes argued that it shwould be more rational if parents would limit their kid’s right to make independent decisions to prevent them ofrom being selfish.
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  • câu 3
    • This essay supports the later view because it is obvious that such kind of limitation will effect badly on social skills of a child in the future.
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    • This essay supports the latter view because it is obvious that such kind of limitation will effect badly onbadly affect the future social skills of a child in the future.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 3
  • câu 4
    • Firstly, this essay will discuss the supposedly roots why youngster become egoists, secondly, it will analyze the reasons why kids should obtain rights to choose.
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    • Firstly, this essay will discuss the supposedly roots to why youngsters become egoists, s. Secondly, it will analyze the reasons why kids should obtain the rights to choose.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
  • câu 5
    • There is an opinion that the main part of those who became an egoists due to lack of necessary parents control in the past.
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    • There is an opinion that the main part of those who became an egoists due to lack of necessary parentsal control in the past.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
  • câu 6
    • Unfortunately, little do people realize that the situation is diametrically opposite and it is the lack of freedom of choice that makes the individual jealously guard their powers.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
  • câu 7
  • câu 8
    • For example, it has been reported by the World Association of Psychologists that such sort of education is not only useless as a method of preventing egoism, but also is a main reason of it’s appearance.
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    • For example, it has been reported by the World Association of Psychologists that such sort of education is not only useless as a method of preventing egoism, but also is athe main reason of it’s appearance.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
    • On the other hand, it is obvious that absence of the ability to make own decisions, a child can grow up dependent with low social skills.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • On the other hand, it is obvious that an absence of the ability to make own decisions, a child can grow up dependent with low social skills.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 9
  • câu 10
    • Moreover, most psychologists consider this kind of the parent’s behavior as one of the types of violence against the child.
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    • Moreover, most psychologists consider this kind of the parent’s behavior as one of the types of violence against the child.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • So, it is not surprisingly that, for instance, according to the report of the same organization, only 8 percent of young respondents expressed a desire to treat their future children the same way as their own parents did.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
    • In conclusion, taking into account all written above, I am firmly convinced that any child should be treated as grown-up person and no unreasonable restrictions are allowed.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • In conclusion, taking into account all written above, I am firmly convinced that any child should be treated as a grown-up person and no unreasonable restrictions arshould be allowed.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
    • This is because neither is it believed that this could prevent selfishness in kids, nor do it could be trusted that this way of education is safe.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 13