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    • Personally, it seems to me that the human being should firstly respect other people and secondly other world's creatures, like animals.
  • It does not mean that animals should be treated badly, but people must consider them like animals and not like humans.
    • To begin with, some people treat animals in an exaggerated way, for instance feeding them with the best food they can afford or buying unnecessary things that their animals would never use, instead of helping people that suffer hanger or health problems.
    • What is more, other people treat their pets like humans, forcing them to wear inappropiate clothes or to live in an unnatural way.
  • At the same time, there are many business companies that exploit animals just to produce clothes or bags.
    • In this case animals are considered as an economic source to capitalize on.
    • In addition to this, the increasing number of zoos and circus has caused a growth in animal's bad treatments, because in those places they have no respect for them and let them live in extreme bad conditions.
    • To sum up, animals should live in their natural environment, so that they can express their istinct and should be treated with respect for their nature and their needs, without exaggeration.

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  • câu 1
    • Personally, it seems to me that the human being should firstly respect other people and secondly other world's creatures, like animals.
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    • Personally, it seems to me that the human being should firstly respect other people and secondly other world's creatures of the world, like animals.
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  • câu 2
    • It does not mean that animals should be treated badly, but people must consider them like animals and not like humans.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 2
  • câu 3
    • To begin with, some people treat animals in an exaggerated way, for instance feeding them with the best food they can afford or buying unnecessary things that their animals would never use, instead of helping people that suffer hanger or health problems.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • To begin with, some people treat animals in an exaggerated way, f.For instance feeding them with the best food they can afford or buying unnecessary things that their animals would never use, instead of helping people that suffer hafrom hunger or health problems.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 3
  • câu 4
    • What is more, other people treat their pets like humans, forcing them to wear inappropiate clothes or to live in an unnatural way.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • What is more, other people treat their pets like humans, forcing them to wear inappropriate clothes or to live in an unnatural way.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
  • câu 5
    • At the same time, there are many business companies that exploit animals just to produce clothes or bags.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
  • câu 6
  • câu 7
    • In addition to this, the increasing number of zoos and circus has caused a growth in animal's bad treatments, because in those places they have no respect for them and let them live in extreme bad conditions.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • In addition to this, the increasing number of zoos and circus has caused a growth in animal's bad treatments, because in those places they have no respect for them and let themy live in extreme bad conditions.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
    • To sum up, animals should live in their natural environment, so that they can express their istinct and should be treated with respect for their nature and their needs, without exaggeration.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • To sum it up, animals should live in their natural environment, so that they can express their ibasic instincts and should be treated with respect for their nature and their needs, without any exaggeration.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8