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  • Personal Statement

    • Personal statement Like a international student, I want to work in the music because she in this gift to exceed the language and the culture.
    • My passion for the music follows me since my childhood, and this is why I want to postulate for your school.
    • I have at the same time the desire of to know more about it in this domain and at the same time the desire to make of my passion my job.
    • When I fell on the audio acoustics and when I saw details him courts, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to make.
    • Indeed, the courts corresponded exactly to what I liked making and me want to learn it more.
    • I had the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiue: an internship to a proffesseur of music and an other one to a sound engineer.
    • I was so able to voice festivales, to use mixing desks and software of recordings, to repair of the electronic material ...
    • Furthermore, durand my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplis.
    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theory several instruments and I play in several music groups.
    • I am very interested in all which touches the sound generally, which will have affected certain of my readings.
    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make him(it) in the music.
    • Furthermore, the fact of learns(teaches) in a self-taught way show that I am capable of working autonomous.
    • My studies in the sciences leads me to solve problems.
    • Of more the fact of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have has good time managment and a good organization.
    • Finally, I know how to show spirit débrouillar as I made him(it) to find internships(training courses).
    • I am very exité at the idea of joining your university, and so can be a day, realize my dream: that to create my own instrument

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  • câu 1
    • Personal statement Like a international student, I want to work in the music because she in this gift to exceed the language and the culture.
      Bầu chọn ngay!

    • Personal statement¶

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      n international student, I want to work in thefor music because she in this gift to exceeinto music we could spread the language and the culture.
      Bầu chọn ngay!

    • Personal statement¶

      Like an international student, I want to work in the music because she in this giftindustry because it is a medium to exceedhange the language and the culture.
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  • câu 2
    • My passion for the music follows me since my childhood, and this is why I want to postulate for your school.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • My passion for the music followsis into me since my childhood, and this is the reason why I want to postulate for your school.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
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  • câu 3
    • I have at the same time the desire of to know more about it in this domain and at the same time the desire to make of my passion my job.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I have at the same time thea desire of to knowing more about it, in this domain, and at the same time the desire to make of my passion my job.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I have aAt the same time I have the desire of to know more about it in this domain and at the same time the desire to make ofmy job as my passion my job.
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  • câu 4
    • When I fell on the audio acoustics and when I saw details him courts, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to make.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • When I fell onlistened to the audio acoustics and when I saw details him courtthe relevant details, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to makdo in my life.
    • When I fell on the audio acoustics and when I saw the details himof its courts, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to make.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 4
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  • câu 6
    • I had the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiue: an internship to a proffesseur of music and an other one to a sound engineer.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I hadgot the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiuec: an internship towith a proffesseuor of music and an other one towith a sound engineer.
    • I had the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiuec: an internship tolike a proffesseuor of music and an the other one tolike a sound engineer.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
  • câu 7
    • I was so able to voice festivales, to use mixing desks and software of recordings, to repair of the electronic material ...
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I was so able to voicetake part in festivales, to use mixing desks and software ofthe recordings software , to repair of the electronic material ...
    • I was so able to the voice festivales, to use mixing desks and software of recordings, and to repair of the electronicsessions material ...
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
    • Furthermore, durand my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplis.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Furthermore, duranding my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplisfier.
    • Furthermore, duranding my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplifiers.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
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  • câu 9
    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theory several instruments and I play in several music groups.
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    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theorywhich gives lessons in the theory of music and practice on several instruments and I play in several musical groups.
    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theory, several instruments and I play in several music groups.
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  • câu 10
    • I am very interested in all which touches the sound generally, which will have affected certain of my readings.
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    • I am very interested in all things which touches the sound generally, which will have an effected in my certain of my readings.
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  • câu 11
    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make him(it) in the music.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make him(do it) in the music.
    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make hithem(it) in the music.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 11
  • câu 12
    • Furthermore, the fact of learns(teaches) in a self-taught way show that I am capable of working autonomous.
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    • Furthermore, the facts of learnsing (teachesing) in a self-taught way shows that I am capable of working autonomousindependently.
    • Furthermore, the fact of learns (teaches) in a self-taught way show that I am capable of working autonomous.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 12
  • câu 13
  • câu 14
    • Of more the fact of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have has good time managment and a good organization.
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    • Of more the facts of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have hasa good time management and a good organizational skills.
    • Of more the fact of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have hasa good time management and a good organization.
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  • câu 15
    • Finally, I know how to show spirit débrouillar as I made him(it) to find internships(training courses).
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Finally, I know how to show spirit débrouillar as I made him(it) to find internships (training courses).
    • Finally, I know how to show spirit débrouillaringenious spirit as I made him(it) to find internships(training courses).
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 15
  • câu 16
    • I am very exité at the idea of joining your university, and so can be a day, realize my dream: that to create my own instrument
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • I am very exitéed at the idea of joining your university, and so can be aon any day, realize my dream: thatwhich is to create my own musical instrument.
    • I am very exitéed at the idea of joining your university, and so can be a day, realize my dream: that to create my own instrument¶
      Bầu chọn ngay!
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