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    • Personal statement Like a international student, I want to work in the music because she in this gift to exceed the language and the culture.
    • My passion for the music follows me since my childhood, and this is why I want to postulate for your school.
    • I have at the same time the desire of to know more about it in this domain and at the same time the desire to make of my passion my job.
    • When I fell on the audio acoustics and when I saw details him courts, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to make.
    • Indeed, the courts corresponded exactly to what I liked making and me want to learn it more.
    • I had the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiue: an internship to a proffesseur of music and an other one to a sound engineer.
    • I was so able to voice festivales, to use mixing desks and software of recordings, to repair of the electronic material ...
    • Furthermore, durand my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplis.
    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theory several instruments and I play in several music groups.
    • I am very interested in all which touches the sound generally, which will have affected certain of my readings.
    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make him(it) in the music.
    • Furthermore, the fact of learns(teaches) in a self-taught way show that I am capable of working autonomous.
    • My studies in the sciences leads me to solve problems.
    • Of more the fact of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have has good time managment and a good organization.
    • Finally, I know how to show spirit débrouillar as I made him(it) to find internships(training courses).
    • I am very exité at the idea of joining your university, and so can be a day, realize my dream: that to create my own instrument

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    • Personal statement Like a international student, I want to work in the music because she in this gift to exceed the language and the culture.
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    • Personal statement¶

      Like an international student, I want to work in the music because she in this giftindustry because it is a medium to exceedhange the language and the culture.
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    • My passion for the music follows me since my childhood, and this is why I want to postulate for your school.
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    • My passion for the music followsis into me since my childhood, and this is the reason why I want to postulate for your school.
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    • I have at the same time the desire of to know more about it in this domain and at the same time the desire to make of my passion my job.
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    • I have at the same time thea desire of to knowing more about it, in this domain, and at the same time the desire to make of my passion my job.
    • I have aAt the same time I have the desire of to know more about it in this domain and at the same time the desire to make ofmy job as my passion my job.
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    • When I fell on the audio acoustics and when I saw details him courts, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to make.
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    • When I fell onlistened to the audio acoustics and when I saw details him courtthe relevant details, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to makdo in my life.
    • When I fell on the audio acoustics and when I saw the details himof its courts, I said to myself that it was exactly what I wanted to make.
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    • I had the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiue: an internship to a proffesseur of music and an other one to a sound engineer.
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    • I hadgot the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiuec: an internship towith a proffesseuor of music and an other one towith a sound engineer.
    • I had the opportunity to make several internships in the field of the musiuec: an internship tolike a proffesseuor of music and an the other one tolike a sound engineer.
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    • I was so able to voice festivales, to use mixing desks and software of recordings, to repair of the electronic material ...
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    • I was so able to voicetake part in festivales, to use mixing desks and software ofthe recordings software , to repair of the electronic material ...
    • I was so able to the voice festivales, to use mixing desks and software of recordings, and to repair of the electronicsessions material ...
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    • Furthermore, durand my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplis.
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    • Furthermore, duranding my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplisfier.
    • Furthermore, duranding my spare time, sometimes I make up and to record by means of my computer, as well as to repair amplifiers.
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    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theory several instruments and I play in several music groups.
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    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theorywhich gives lessons in the theory of music and practice on several instruments and I play in several musical groups.
    • Outside the high school, I study in an academy the music theory, several instruments and I play in several music groups.
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    • I am very interested in all which touches the sound generally, which will have affected certain of my readings.
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    • I am very interested in all things which touches the sound generally, which will have an effected in my certain of my readings.
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    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make him(it) in the music.
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    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make him(do it) in the music.
    • I am also capable of working alone as in a group, as well as of managing a group as I already make hithem(it) in the music.
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    • Furthermore, the fact of learns(teaches) in a self-taught way show that I am capable of working autonomous.
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    • Furthermore, the facts of learnsing (teachesing) in a self-taught way shows that I am capable of working autonomousindependently.
    • Furthermore, the fact of learns (teaches) in a self-taught way show that I am capable of working autonomous.
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    • Of more the fact of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have has good time managment and a good organization.
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    • Of more the facts of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have hasa good time management and a good organizational skills.
    • Of more the fact of mixing the studies with the music obliges me to have hasa good time management and a good organization.
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    • I am very exité at the idea of joining your university, and so can be a day, realize my dream: that to create my own instrument
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    • I am very exitéed at the idea of joining your university, and so can be aon any day, realize my dream: thatwhich is to create my own musical instrument.
    • I am very exitéed at the idea of joining your university, and so can be a day, realize my dream: that to create my own instrument¶
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