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    • Marriage (Discursive essay)

  • “Marriage is a wonderful institution, but who wants to live in an institution” Groucho Marx Many people, both men and women are afraid to marry for one simple reason - afraid of losing independence and be responsible for the established union.
  • Undoubtedly, the one who married are unlikely to be able to walk all night long in a fun company with friends or to spend the all weekends without fear of running into a misunderstanding, over a beer.
    • However, marriage as we know, has not only disadvantages, but also the obvious advantages.
  • After all, there is the world of things is absolutely good or bad in itself.
  • If we cannot to accept this fact, it will be mean to divide the world into black and white, forgetting the variety of colors and shades.
  • The marriage brings with it a lot of advantages, for which people decide to change their peaceful and well-established life.
  • Firstly, children growing up in a full marriage are happier and are protected members of society.
  • Secondly, the highest level of spiritual closeness between married couples is possible only through love and understanding, especially if the marriage is sanctified by church and the young people believe (cherish) in the sanctity of marriage.
  • Thirdly, you have a constant sexual life without the risk of catching any sore.
    • Fourthly, married men and women move to a new social level than unmarried people, so employers consider that people like that more responsible and more productive.
  • Fifthly, and finally, the economical and domestic help (aid) is also an important argument in favor of marriage.
  • You can be sure that you will not leave in trouble.
  • On the other hand, you have to understand that you lose a certain share of freedom when you want to marry.
  • Moreover, you have to be prepared for it and you will face with problems such as raising kids, financial ответственность, fighting between your desires and your responsibilities, spending all your leisure with family.
    • Perhaps, it would be necessary to refuse some your habits.
    • For example, support that young man is not used to smoke inside, clean room and is used to skinting up socks, is used to leaving a lot of dirty dishes until it lasts, washing the dishes in the case you have any caps at home or young woman used to taking bath so long, or used to talking on the phone with a friend two or three hours, or she is not used to cooking small doses every day in pursuit of keeping fit.
  • The examples are quite innocent, however even they can cause discontent of partner and strained relationship.
  • In conclusion in above, I suppose that just a family can be a safe haven and a place forgiveness that welcomes one, where you can be understood and be supported.
    • After all, it is so nice to fell loved one close by yourself and know that you belong to each other, and no power do you part.
  • Taking the most important decision in his life not to be in a hurry with the choice, because marriage is not in a way you choose shoes in a store.
  • I completely agree with the words of Robert C Dodds «The goal in marriage not to think alike but think together».

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  • câu 1
    • “Marriage is a wonderful institution, but who wants to live in an institution” Groucho Marx Many people, both men and women are afraid to marry for one simple reason - afraid of losing independence and be responsible for the established union.
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  • câu 2
    • Undoubtedly, the one who married are unlikely to be able to walk all night long in a fun company with friends or to spend the all weekends without fear of running into a misunderstanding, over a beer.
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  • câu 5
    • If we cannot to accept this fact, it will be mean to divide the world into black and white, forgetting the variety of colors and shades.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 5
  • câu 6
    • The marriage brings with it a lot of advantages, for which people decide to change their peaceful and well-established life.
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  • câu 8
    • Secondly, the highest level of spiritual closeness between married couples is possible only through love and understanding, especially if the marriage is sanctified by church and the young people believe (cherish) in the sanctity of marriage.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8
  • câu 9
  • câu 10
    • Fourthly, married men and women move to a new social level than unmarried people, so employers consider that people like that more responsible and more productive.
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    • Fourthly, married men and women move to a newhigher social level than unmarried people, so employers consider that people like thatassume that married people are more responsible and more productive.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 10
  • câu 11
    • Fifthly, and finally, the economical and domestic help (aid) is also an important argument in favor of marriage.
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  • câu 12
  • câu 13
    • On the other hand, you have to understand that you lose a certain share of freedom when you want to marry.
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  • câu 14
    • Moreover, you have to be prepared for it and you will face with problems such as raising kids, financial ответственность, fighting between your desires and your responsibilities, spending all your leisure with family.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 14
  • câu 15
  • câu 16
    • For example, support that young man is not used to smoke inside, clean room and is used to skinting up socks, is used to leaving a lot of dirty dishes until it lasts, washing the dishes in the case you have any caps at home or young woman used to taking bath so long, or used to talking on the phone with a friend two or three hours, or she is not used to cooking small doses every day in pursuit of keeping fit.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • For example, supportse that a young man is not used to smoke ing outside, or cleaning his room and is used to skinting up socks (??), is used to leaving a lot of dirty dishes until ithe lasts dish is dirty, washing the dishes ionly when the chase you have no cleany caups at home, or a young woman is used to taking bath so longa long bath, or is used to talking on the phone with a friend for two or three hours, or she is not used to cooking small doseportions every day in the pursuit of keeping fit.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 16ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 16
  • câu 17
    • The examples are quite innocent, however even they can cause discontent of partner and strained relationship.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 17
  • câu 18
    • In conclusion in above, I suppose that just a family can be a safe haven and a place forgiveness that welcomes one, where you can be understood and be supported.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 18
  • câu 19
    • After all, it is so nice to fell loved one close by yourself and know that you belong to each other, and no power do you part.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • After all, it is so nice to fellel a loved one close by yourself and know that you belong to each other, and no power docan force you apart.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 19
  • câu 20
    • Taking the most important decision in his life not to be in a hurry with the choice, because marriage is not in a way you choose shoes in a store.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 20
  • câu 21
    • I completely agree with the words of Robert C Dodds «The goal in marriage not to think alike but think together».
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 21ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 21