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    • People who thinks that make work children is to give them a valuable work experience, should distinguish between children and teenegers nearest to adult life.
    • If it concern teenegers, called children just because they are not adults, that appreciation could be accepted.
    • Considering that this experience is choosen volunteering and probably to pay not fundamental needs.
    • But, when the decision to work, instead of studying (or instead to study??) is taken for paying basic needs, then "the valuable work experience" is out of context, because this becomes a constriction.
    • I agree with people who say that make to work children is wrong.
    • To me (or for me??) this is a way of abuse, because children should be guaranteed to live a childhood without worries of adult life.
    • Children should live relaxed and go to school, and not sacrifice living like slaves just for eating.
    • Each goverment must respect the rights signed by their own country, and bring to children the possibility to study, to be dressed and fed.
    • These are some of essential needs, reasons for what children work in some places of the world.
    • They are slaves among the indifference of politicians and wealthy people.
    • The cases in which "children" can learning and take responsability from work, concern just some places where children do this previous agreement with their parents, and where society recognised their rights.
    • So, these activities are made just for some periods and is not a constriction.
    • Is known that to be contrary, we are talking about places where poverty leads people to accept the childhood labor.
    • In these poor countries children feel responsability for their younger brothers and sisters, like their were adults that must provide money to home.
    • To finish my thought, obviously, if a boy/girl has everything, the experience of working leads him/her to the real world.
    • It teaches him/her how his/her parents earn money.
    • And not only, but, teaches how to approach people outside of the own confort zone.
    • This last is precious because give you self confidence.

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