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  • Mini Essay: Is it Better to Work Hard or Work Smart?

  • It is believed that a successful person is goal-oriented as well as hard working.
    • However, some people think that this is not so important with the right connections and efficiently applying resources such as money.
    • In this essay I am going to discuss both points of view and give the my opinion about why working hard is not enough to get success.
    • On the one hand, an assertive person, who spends all their time to achieve a certain goal, is likely to get a promotion, because their behaviour has showed their boss that they are responsible and can get things done on time.
    • For instance, this type of people spend all their time at work, they even work on holidays and sometimes on the weekends.
    • Of course they have as much more money as and less time to spend it.
    • On the other hand, a really successful people are the bosses or owners of companies , where the people from the example above work, and they are completely different from their employees.
    • First of all they have the right connections who help to solve problems in their business and make money more efficiently.
  • Secondly, they have enough money to hire the professionals who will make money for them.
  • For example, this kind of people, who hire better workers and have connections, have a lot of money as well as time to spend it to make their dreams come true.
    • To sum up, I agree with opinion that working smart is much better than working hard, because those people have more money and more free-time.

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    • In this essay I am going to discuss both points of view and give the my opinion about why working hard is not enough to get success.
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    • In this essay I am going to discuss both points of view and give the my opinion about why workexplain why I believe relying on hard work is not enough to getbe success.ful.
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    • On the one hand, an assertive person, who spends all their time to achieve a certain goal, is likely to get a promotion, because their behaviour has showed their boss that they are responsible and can get things done on time.
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    • On the one hand, an assertive person, who spends all of their time trying/aiming to achieve a certain goal, is likely to get a promotion,. This is because their behaviour has showedn their boss that they are responsible and can get things done on time.
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    • On the other hand, a really successful people are the bosses or owners of companies , where the people from the example above work, and they are completely different from their employees.
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    • On the other hand, a realtruly successful people are the bosses or owners of companies , (where the people from the example above work, and they). These people/individuals are completely different from their employees.
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    • For example, this kind of people, who hire better workers and have connections, have a lot of money as well as time to spend it to make their dreams come true.
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    • To sum up, I agree with opinion that working smart is much better than working hard, because those people have more money and more free-time.
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    • To sum up, I agree with opinion that working smart is much better than working hard, because those people have more money and more free-time.
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