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  • The Essay

    • Topic: In many countries, as increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer games.
    • To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
    • The question of violence on TV and in computer games as its link to the increase in crime as well has been widely discussed in recent years.
    • Personally, I think that this question is a controversial one and is open for debate.
    • It is a well-known fact that television and computer games have a great impact on adolescent`s behavior.
    • Seeing favorite personage who are presented as a hero on TV or in a game children try to copy their behavior in real life.
  • Moreover, in view of the fact that heroes from video games or movies are never punished for their violent actions, teenagers don`t realize that violence can lead to the crime.
    • Not only children, adults often don`t understand that their aggressive actions can be considered as a crime.
    • One more thing that should be mentioned is that TV and games filled with cruel behavior and speech disrupt any boundaries of allowance in people`s mind.
    • If a game hero is allowed to behave violently with no taking responsibility for his actions, his admirers will not perceive his actions as inappropriate behavior.
    • As a result, people often don`t understand what is allowed to do and what kind of actions are prohibited and can lead to undesirable consequences.
    • On the other hand, Television is not the only way for forming people`s behavior.
    • The community plays a significant role in human`s life.
    • If a teenager or an adult is brought up in a positive social atmosphere neither TV nor violent games can affect his behavior in a bad way.
    • In conclusion, I would say that violence on TV isn`t the only reason which causes the increase in crime.
    • I`m convinced that the main reasons of crime are poverty and illiteracy.
    • Once these social problems will be solved, the number of crime will drop essentially.
    • However, violence on TV and in computer games should be under control of the government in order to protect our children from negative emotions.

PLEASE, HELP TO CORRECT EACH SENTENCE! - English

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    • Topic: In many countries, as increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer games.
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    • Topic: In many countries, asn increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer games.
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    • The question of violence on TV and in computer games as its link to the increase in crime as well has been widely discussed in recent years.
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    • The question of vViolence on TV and in computer games as itsa link to the increase in crime as well has been widely discussed in recent years.
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    • Seeing favorite personage who are presented as a hero on TV or in a game children try to copy their behavior in real life.
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    • Seeing favorite personagecharacters who are presented as a heroes on TV or in a gamevideo games causes children try to copy their behavior in real life.
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    • Moreover, in view of the fact that heroes from video games or movies are never punished for their violent actions, teenagers don`t realize that violence can lead to the crime.
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    • Not only children, adults often don`t understand that their aggressive actions can be considered as a crime.
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    • Not only childrenSometimes, adults oftenalso don`t understand that their aggressive actions can be considered as a crime.
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    • One more thing that should be mentioned is that TV and games filled with cruel behavior and speech disrupt any boundaries of allowance in people`s mind.
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    • One more thing that should be mentioned is that TV and games filled with cruel behavior and speech disrupt any boundaries of allowance in people`in person's mind.
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    • If a game hero is allowed to behave violently with no taking responsibility for his actions, his admirers will not perceive his actions as inappropriate behavior.
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    • If a game hero is allowed to behave violently with noout taking responsibility for his actions, his admirers will not perceive his actions as inappropriate behavior.
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    • As a result, people often don`t understand what is allowed to do and what kind of actions are prohibited and can lead to undesirable consequences.
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    • As a result, people often don`'t understand what is allowed to doare appropriate actions, and what kind of actions are prohibited and can lead to undesirable consequences.
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    • If a teenager or an adult is brought up in a positive social atmosphere neither TV nor violent games can affect his behavior in a bad way.
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    • If a teenager or an adult is brought up in a positive social atmosphere, neither TV nor violent games can affect his behavior in a bad way.
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    • In conclusion, I would say that violence on TV isn`t the only reason which causes the increase in crime.
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    • In conclusion, I would say that violence on TV isn`'t the only reason which causesfactor that contributes to the increase in crime.
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    • However, violence on TV and in computer games should be under control of the government in order to protect our children from negative emotions.
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    • However, violence on TV and in computer games should be under control of the government in order to protect our children from negative emotioninfluences. ¶
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