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The Essay

• Topic: In many countries, as increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer games.

• To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

• The question of violence on TV and in computer games as its link to the increase in crime as well has been widely discussed in recent years.

• Personally, I think that this question is a controversial one and is open for debate.

• It is a well-known fact that television and computer games have a great impact on adolescent`s behavior.

• Seeing favorite personage who are presented as a hero on TV or in a game children try to copy their behavior in real life.

• Not only children, adults often don`t understand that their aggressive actions can be considered as a crime.

• One more thing that should be mentioned is that TV and games filled with cruel behavior and speech disrupt any boundaries of allowance in people`s mind.

• If a game hero is allowed to behave violently with no taking responsibility for his actions, his admirers will not perceive his actions as inappropriate behavior.

• As a result, people often don`t understand what is allowed to do and what kind of actions are prohibited and can lead to undesirable consequences.

• On the other hand, Television is not the only way for forming people`s behavior.

• The community plays a significant role in human`s life.

• If a teenager or an adult is brought up in a positive social atmosphere neither TV nor violent games can affect his behavior in a bad way.

• In conclusion, I would say that violence on TV isn`t the only reason which causes the increase in crime.

• I`m convinced that the main reasons of crime are poverty and illiteracy.

• Once these social problems will be solved, the number of crime will drop essentially.

• However, violence on TV and in computer games should be under control of the government in order to protect our children from negative emotions.