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  • Study in France

    • After graduating from college, my father wanted me to attend a training about mineral but more focus on rare minerals such as diamonds and jade so that I can do business in this field.
    • But it’s my father’s interest, not mine.
    • At the same time, an old friend in France suggested me to go abroad and to learn different culture and different way of life.
    • So I decided to joined her and proceed my master degree in France.
    • I told my parents of my decision but they were strong against.
    • Then I began to learn French and apply for a visa unbeknown my parents (I began to learn French and apply for the visa holding out on my parents).
    • Just before leaving, I told them the truth and they were surprised but also proud of me that I can insist on my decision and my perseverance.
    • But if I meet the same situation, I will try to convince them at first, because don’t let them worry about me.

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  • câu 1
    • After graduating from college, my father wanted me to attend a training about mineral but more focus on rare minerals such as diamonds and jade so that I can do business in this field.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • After graduating from college, my father wanted me to attend a training class about mineral, but moreto focus more on rare minerals such as diamonds and jade so that I canould do business in thisat field.
    • After graduating from college, my father wanted me to attend a training class about minerals, but more focused on rare minerals such as diamonds and jade so that I can do business in this field.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 1
  • câu 2
  • câu 3
    • At the same time, an old friend in France suggested me to go abroad and to learn different culture and different way of life.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • At the same time, an old friend in France suggested me to go abroad and to learn different cultures and different ways of life.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 3
  • câu 4
  • câu 5
  • câu 6
    • Then I began to learn French and apply for a visa unbeknown my parents (I began to learn French and apply for the visa holding out on my parents).
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Then, I began to learn French and apply for a vVisa card, unbeknown to my parents (I began to learn French and apply for the vVisa, holding out on my parents).
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 6
  • câu 7
    • Just before leaving, I told them the truth and they were surprised but also proud of me that I can insist on my decision and my perseverance.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • Just before leaving, I told them the truth, and they were surprised, but also proud of me that I canould insist on my decision and my perseverance.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 7
  • câu 8
    • But if I meet the same situation, I will try to convince them at first, because don’t let them worry about me.
      Bầu chọn ngay!
    • But iIf I meet the same situation, I will try to convince them at first, because dI won’t let them worry about me.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - câu 8