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    • Insufficient respect to older people

  • Throughout this century the role of elderly people has changed enormously.
    • Parents have become heaviness for their children who do not respect older generation, abuse them and do not take care of them.
  • According to surveys, the number of old people who live in elderly homes rose significantly during the last 3 decades.
    • This example shows that old people are considered as useless members of society and families.
    • Possibly, the main reason of insufficient respect to older people is modern life style that affects relations between people.
    • Nowadays, young couples prefer to live apart from their parents, they don`t accept the interference into their private lives.
    • Needless to say, different generations have different mentality.
    • Due to distinct points of view, young people consider their parents "old-fashioned".
    • Furthermore, old people tend to hold the lifestyle of the past what leads to misunderstanding between children and parents.
    • Another thing that should be mentioned is modern pace of life.
    • Working people are too busy at work and don`t have enough time to dedicate it to their parents.
    • It is a well-known fact that as rarer the communication as weaker the connection between people.
    • Children and parents who meet each other once a week don`t have common interests and topics for conversation, they aren`t aware of each other`s lives and problems.
    • Certainly, this modern trend has negative effect on society in general.
    • Young people lose the sense of community and forget about the value of family, they become more cynic and selfish.
    • In conclusion, I would say that the sense of community which is taken from families is the most crucial factor of social development.
    • Only communities could cope with wars and disasters throughout centuries.
    • And the loss of the value of community can cause more terrible problems in future.

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    • Parents have become heaviness for their children who do not respect older generation, abuse them and do not take care of them.
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    • Parents have become heaviness forignorant/uncaring concerning their children who do not respect the older generation, who abuse them and do not take care of them.
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    • According to surveys, the number of old people who live in elderly homes rose significantly during the last 3 decades.
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    • This example shows that old people are considered as useless members of society and families.
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    • This example shows thatcan illustrate how old people are considered as usemore and more as useless/marginal/pointless members of society and their families.
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    • Possibly, the main reason of insufficient respect to older people is modern life style that affects relations between people.
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    • Possibly, the main reason of insufficient respect to older people isIt may be that the principal factor driving this lack of respect for the older generation relates to the repercussions of modern life style, that affectsre now known to be dramatically changing social interaction and our relations betweenwith other people.
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    • Nowadays, young couples prefer to live apart from their parents, they don`t accept the interference into their private lives.
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    • NowadaysAt present, young couples generally prefer to live apart from their parents,; they don`t accept theoften cannot tolerate what they see today as interference into their private lives, and what older generations would have seen as family bonding or connecting.
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    • Due to distinct points of view, young people consider their parents "old-fashioned".
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    • Due to diIt is these and other contrastinctg points of view, which lead young people to consider their parents as "old-fashioned". By reverse, older generations may lement the 'rebellious' and often 'careless' nature of younger ones.
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    • Furthermore, old people tend to hold the lifestyle of the past what leads to misunderstanding between children and parents.
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    • Furthermore, old people tend to hold the lifestyle of the past what leads toThis generational divide is further reinforced by the fact that old people tend to be rather conservative (with a small 'c') and resistant to change. This may deepen any misunderstanding between children and parents of 'another mentality'.
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    • Working people are too busy at work and don`t have enough time to dedicate it to their parents.
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    • Working people are too busy aPeople today often have more pressures in lives, and now that many more people work longer hours and carry out wmork and don`t have enough timee complicated tasks, they simply do not have the time or energy to dedicate it to their parents.
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    • It is a well-known fact that as rarer the communication as weaker the connection between people.
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    • It is a well-known fact that as rarer theThese trends are alarming, for a timeless truth about humanity is that we are social beings, and the less frequent and less meaningful our communication asis, then the weaker theour connection between peoplwith others will be.
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    • Children and parents who meet each other once a week don`t have common interests and topics for conversation, they aren`t aware of each other`s lives and problems.
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    • Children and parents who meet each oonly interact, talk and share their lives once a week don`t have common interests and topics for conversation, they aren`t aware ofwill tend to have fewer common interests, less understanding of each other, and will altogether generally feel more and more distant from each other`'s lives and problems.
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    • In conclusion, I would say that the sense of community which is taken from families is the most crucial factor of social development.
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    • In conclusion, I would say that the sense of community- which is taken frombuilt on the foundations of families- is the most crucial factor of social development.
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    • Only communities could cope with wars and disasters throughout centuries.
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    • Only communities could c- people with wars and disasters throughout centuriesin unity and sharing a deep connection- have been strong enough to resist the ills and demons of this world.
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    • And the loss of the value of community can cause more terrible problems in future.
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    • AndMost important of all, theis loss ofin the value of community can cause more terrible problems in futureonly foresee the onset of problems, and our lack of strength to find a solution.
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