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  • Mini Essay: Dealing with Stress

    • Nowadays, stress is a common problem in the modern world and people are suffering of it whole life.
    • I would like to describe my experience dealing with stress and ways how I the problems were solved.
    • Firstly, people are getting stress at their work; it could be problems with boss, customers and even commuting.
    • For example, some years ago I had problems on my work, because I had to solved so many issues.
    • A was communicated with so many customers, co-workers and sometimes they had a different point of view.
    • Therefore, to succeed in it, I changed how I manage stress.
    • As a result, I had pressure on me and opportunity to found the solution.
    • The solve of the problems for me was meditation and a visualization routine.
    • I was prepared for hard situation and was aware when stressful situations happened.
    • I usually immediately started to remember peaceful scenery from my life and I was thought that my body responded for that situation just helped me to took action.
    • Secondly, sometimes stress cause by relation with a family members.
    • In my experience, usually helps care of each other and long talking.
    • In conclusion, there are such many ways to get stress and to help with it people should care of relatives; Also, if it could be possible to use power of own imagination to make our self believe that nothing wrong with stress and it just body reaction to take actions.

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    • Nowadays, stress is a common problem in the modern world and people are suffering of it whole life.
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    • Nowadays, stress is a common problem in the modern world and people are suffering of it whole lifefrom it thoughout their lives.
    • Nowadays, stress is a common problem in the modern world and people are suffering of itfrom it throughout their whole life.
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    • I would like to describe my experience dealing with stress and ways how I the problems were solved.
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    • I would like to describe my experience in dealing with stress and ways on how I the problems were solvedsolved my problems.
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    • Firstly, people are getting stress at their work; it could be problems with boss, customers and even commuting.
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    • Firstly, people are getting stress at theirstressed by work; i. It could be problems with the boss, customers and even commuting.
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    • A was communicated with so many customers, co-workers and sometimes they had a different point of view.
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    • A wasWhilst communicateding with so many customers, and co-workers and sometimes they had a different point ofI realised that we had conflicting views.
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    • As a result, I had pressure on me and opportunity to found the solution.
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    • As a result, I had there was both pressure on me andand the opportunity to fouind thea solution.
    • As a result, I had pressure on meThis put me under a lot of pressure but, at the same time, offered and opportunity to fouind thea solution.
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    • I usually immediately started to remember peaceful scenery from my life and I was thought that my body responded for that situation just helped me to took action.
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    • I usually immediately started to remember peaceful sceneryies from my life and I was thought that¶my body responded for that situation just. This helped me to tookake action.
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    • In conclusion, there are such many ways to get stress and to help with it people should care of relatives; Also, if it could be possible to use power of own imagination to make our self believe that nothing wrong with stress and it just body reaction to take actions.
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    • In conclusion, there are such many ways to get stress and to help with it people should care of relatives;¶Also, if it could be possible to use power ofI would like to inform you that they are many situations that can stress you out. However, caring for your relatives can help in reducing stress. In addition, if possible, you can use your own imagination to make our selfcement a believef that 'there's nothing wrong with stress' and ithat 'stress is simply just bodya reaction to take actions.in the body.'
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