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    • If people migrate to cities, they become more overcrowded and so always more people will take cars to go to work and as a result traffic congestions will rise sharply.
    • A good idea would be to increase the number of public buses in the first hours of the day.
    • By doing this many people will prefer to use public transportation to go to work and traffic congestions will decrease.
  • People spend too much time watching TV.
    • For example some studies demonstrate that children spend around 5 to 6 hours a day watching tv programs.
    • Consequently they don't have enough time to do their homeworks and to socialize whit their friends.
    • If parents will be more restrictive about use of TV and organize to their children alternative activities then this problem could be easily overcome.
    • This will lead to minor use of tv from children and that will also strenghten the bounds with their parent.
    • The development of tourism often create resentment among local people because tourists do not respect their traditions and their culture.
    • For example some south american tribù don't want that tourists take picture of them because of religion beliefs.
    • The obvious answer is to explain tourists this cultural belief and to control more strictly that they rispect this rule.
    • Furthermore this measure could garantee a better coexistence between tourists and local tribù.

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    • Linking phrasesSome studies show that the children spend from 5 to 7 hours to watch TV¶
      Consequently, their eyes will be hurt and harmful. If they keep watching TV, then not only their eyes but also health is affected¶
      This will lead to a bad habits for their life.
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    • If people migrate to cities, they become more overcrowded and so always more people will take cars to go to work and as a result traffic congestions will rise sharply.
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    • If people migrate to cities, they become more overcrowded and so always more people will always take cars to go to work and as a result traffic congestions will rise sharply.
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    • By doing this many people will prefer to use public transportation to go to work and traffic congestions will decrease.
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    • By doing this, many people will prefer to use public transportation to go to work and traffic congestions will decrease.
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    • If parents will be more restrictive about use of TV and organize to their children alternative activities then this problem could be easily overcome.
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    • If parents will bare more restrictive about the use of TV and organize to their children alternative activities for their children then this problem could be easily be overcome.
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    • This will lead to minor use of tv from children and that will also strenghten the bounds with their parent.
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    • This will lead to minor use of tv fromless frequent TV use by children and thatwhich will also strenghthen the bounds with their parents.
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    • The development of tourism often create resentment among local people because tourists do not respect their traditions and their culture.
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    • The development of tourism often creates resentment among local people because tourists do not respect theirlocal traditions and their culture.
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    • For example some south american tribù don't want that tourists take picture of them because of religion beliefs.
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    • For example some sSouth aAmerican tribùes don't want that tourists to take pictures of them because of their religion beliefs.
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    • The obvious answer is to explain tourists this cultural belief and to control more strictly that they rispect this rule.
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    • The obvious answer is to explain tourists this cultural belief and to control more strictlyto tourists and to ensure that they riespect this rulem.
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