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  • Should young people be interested only in money?
  • Certainly, there are various opinions over this subject.
  • As far as I am concerned, I believe that one shouldn’t see money as the most important value in the life.
    • In the first place, being wealthy does not guaranty you being happy.
    • Thus, those, who are rich enough, often say that they suffer from it, because for them it is some harder to find true friends and a spouse, as more often than not others look at them only as at another source of money.
  • Moreover, it is not a secret that money cannot provide you with health, so I assume that there are more significant aims for people to aspire, such as sports, self-development and so forth.
  • On the other hand, there is another belief.
    • You may think that if young people attempt getting money, they will be more likely to become self-confident, independent and, obviously, rich.
    • As for me, I cannot agree with this statement since I am certain that if young generation starts pursuing gaining more, they may forget what they do have – the family, friends and simple things to be pleased for; and all this will not only never bring you happiness, but also can make you lose it.
    • So, according to all the arguments above, it becomes clear that young people should never choose money as the main goal in their life.

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    • Thus, those, who are rich enough, often say that they suffer from it, because for them it is some harder to find true friends and a spouse, as more often than not others look at them only as at another source of money.
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    • Thus, those, who are rich enough, often say that they suffer from it, because for them it is some harder to find true friends and a spouse, as more often than not others look at them only as at another source of money.
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    • Moreover, it is not a secret that money cannot provide you with health, so I assume that there are more significant aims for people to aspire, such as sports, self-development and so forth.
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    • You may think that if young people attempt getting money, they will be more likely to become self-confident, independent and, obviously, rich.
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    • You may think that if young people attempt to getting money, they will be more likely to become self-confident, independent and, obviously, rich.
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    • As for me, I cannot agree with this statement since I am certain that if young generation starts pursuing gaining more, they may forget what they do have – the family, friends and simple things to be pleased for; and all this will not only never bring you happiness, but also can make you lose it.
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    • As for me, I cannot agree with this statement since I am certain that if the young generation starts pursuing to gaining more, they may forget what they do have – the family, friends and simple things to be pleased for; and all this will not only never bring you happisadness, but can also can make you lose it.
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    • As for me, I cannot agree with this statement since I am certain that if young generation starts pursuing to gaining more money, they may forget what they do have – the family, friends and simple things to be pleased for; and all this willtheir happiness. Keeping focus on gaining money not only never bring you happisadness, but also can make you lose ithe most important thing in your life.
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    • So, according to all the arguments above, it becomes clear that young people should never choose money as the main goal in their life.
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    • So, To sum up,according to all the arguments above, it becomes clear that young people should nevern't choose money as the main goal in their life. ¶
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