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添削のお手伝いをしましょう！修正済み

noisette03からのテキスト - English

  • formal letter

  • I am writing in support of Aurelie as a candidate for your Masters program.
    • From June to August 2012 Aurelie has worked for me as an aupair and she looked after my 11 years old daughter.
    • Aurelie clearly has a strong passion for the fahion industry in light of the fact that together we watched a TV program from the United States (it is not broadcasted in France) a competition between young fashion stylists who had to design clothes and she enjoyed it a lot.
    • Moreover I am sure her sense of creativity will be a strong asset for this Masters, indeed when she took care of my daughter she taught her how to create nice small objects made out of polymer clay.
    • Together they made a tiny Louis Vuitton like bag key ring for me and it was remarkably well done.
  • Aurelie is devoted to her work, she is flexible and willing to work on any task that is assigned to her.
    • In addition, she is extremely organized, reliable and she is polyvalent for she can speak different languages.
  • In view of this experience, I have no hesitations in recommending Aurelie for your study programme.
    • Please do feel free to contact me with questions or inquirie at ...

添削の手助けをお願いします！ - English