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  • Please help me for correcting the composition blew. mainly find out the wrong using of grammar or somewhere not native，Many thanks in advance.
    • The bar chart shows the changes of sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years(from 2000 to 2003).
    • The volume of sale of CDs kept a highest postion of sales, though this figure indicated a slow drop among those 4 years.
    • In contrust, a significant increase was found in the sale colume of DVD/Vido over the same period(from less than 20 $bn to 31 $bn ).
  • This number for Games software also suffered a moderate rise (19 $bn in 2003, 15 $bn in 2000).
    • CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palyed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000.
    • CDs and DVDs, though, still less share than CDs in 2003, but manifested an impressive captitiveness

MOHON BANTU UNTUK BETULKAN SETIAP AYAT! - English

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  • Ayat 1
    • Please help me for correcting the composition blew. mainly find out the wrong using of grammar or somewhere not native，Many thanks in advance.
      Undi sekarang!
    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 1
  • Ayat 2
    • The bar chart shows the changes of sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years(from 2000 to 2003).
      Undi sekarang!
    • The bar chart shows the changes ofin sales in 3 different areas(Game software, Cds, DVD or video) in those 4 years( from 2000 to 2003).
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 2
  • Ayat 3
    • The volume of sale of CDs kept a highest postion of sales, though this figure indicated a slow drop among those 4 years.
      Undi sekarang!
    • The volume of sales of CDs kept aremained the highest postion( of sales, l three areas?) although even this figure indicated a slow drop amongover those 4 years.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 3TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 3
  • Ayat 4
    • In contrust, a significant increase was found in the sale colume of DVD/Vido over the same period(from less than 20 $bn to 31 $bn ).
      Undi sekarang!
    • In contruast, a significant increase was found in the sale cs volumes of DVDs/Vidoeos over the same period (from less than 20 $bn to almost/over?31 $bn ).
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 4TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 4
  • Ayat 5
  • Ayat 6
    • CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palyed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000.
      Undi sekarang!
    • CDs owns the strongest purchasing power, which palayed an absolute lead role among media productions and hold about double times than DVD/Video, three times than Games software in 2000.
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    • TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 6TAMBAH PEMBETULAN YANG BARU! - Ayat 6
  • Ayat 7