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Everlages
Oh no!I forgot the way to my beginning point in Everlages.There are many insects,spiders and snakes in this place.They can sting me,I can die(((.It is so good that I weared long trousers and strong boots.And I used a lot of insect repellent.
- Look!The ground is shaking!I hear a range noise like an aeroplane engine.I should climb up a tree.Ok,I am on the highest place I can get.Oh!I can not held my arms on a tree any more.I am falling!And right now I am in the swamp.It tries to swallow me!But I am lying flat and beginning to to crawl out very careful.I do all my moves very slowly.And I AM FREE!!!Hurray!

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- Oh no!I forgot the way to my beginning point in Everlages.There are many insects,spiders and snakes in this place.They can sting me,I can die(((.It is so good that I weared long trousers and strong boots.And I used a lot of insect repellent.
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- Look!The ground is shaking!I hear a range noise like an aeroplane engine.I should climb up a tree.Ok,I am on the highest place I can get.Oh!I can not held my arms on a tree any more.I am falling!And right now I am in the swamp.It tries to swallow me!But I am lying flat and beginning to to crawl out very careful.I do all my moves very slowly.And I AM FREE!!!Hurray!
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- Look! The ground is shaking! I am hearing a strange noise like the one of an aeroplane engine. I should climb up a tree.Ok, I am on the highest place I can get. Oh! I can not heold my arms on athat tree any more. I am falling! And right now I am in the swamp. It tries to swallow me! But I am lying flat and beginning to to crawl out very careful.ly. I do all my moves very slowly. And I AM FREE!!! Hurray!
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- ΠΡΟΣΘΕΣΤΕ μία ΝΕΑ ΔΙΟΡΘΩΣΗ! - Πρόταση 2