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  • The Sequoia Alley

    • When I feel weary after long study day, which is often full of tedious activities, which imply continuous fight tooth and nail for grades and justice, I want to alienate from the city life and take a deep breath around nature.
    • As far as I can remember myself, I’ve always been a villager trough and trough even though I live in a megalopolis my whole conscious life.
  • I guess the thirst for a quiet life was inherited from my dad.
    • When I seek rest and relief, I close my eyes and daydream about my early childhood years, which I spend with my family in the countryside next to the sequoia forest.
    • Every morning was a godsend for me because I woke up late from the radiant, bright sunlight, which penetrated into my room and tickled my face.
    • I got up jubilantly because I knew that I was going to hastily run to my parent’s bedroom and on my way there I would encounter our shaggy dog who would keep me company, jumping and envisioning coming morning walk.
    • When I met parents after a long night sleep, my dad took my hand and we would get ready for our morning stroll.
  • Those first minutes on the fresh air were always incredible.
  • They filled me with power and health and excited me.
    • Huge sequoias were sturdy, they looked like a mighty wall, which took care of our peace every night, gave us a scene of safety.
    • While my dad and I were walking down the sequoia alley, he could put his hand on my head and gently finger my wavy baby hair.
  • In that moment, I felt so small in comparison with him.
  • I felt the whole love in the Universe and I knew for sure that my dad would always protect me like those huge sequoias.
    • We usually walk for an hour, watching our exuberant dog running in the distance with dancing long and funny ears, and mighty sequoias accompanied us.

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  • 문장 1
    • When I feel weary after long study day, which is often full of tedious activities, which imply continuous fight tooth and nail for grades and justice, I want to alienate from the city life and take a deep breath around nature.
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    • When I feel weary after long study day, which is often full of tedious activities, which imply a continuous fight tooth and nail fight for grades and justice, I wanted to alienate myself from the city life and take a deep breath around nature.
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  • 문장 2
    • As far as I can remember myself, I’ve always been a villager trough and trough even though I live in a megalopolis my whole conscious life.
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    • As far as I can remember myselfcall, I’ve always been a villager through and through even though I have lived in a megalopolis my whole conscious life.
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    • When I seek rest and relief, I close my eyes and daydream about my early childhood years, which I spend with my family in the countryside next to the sequoia forest.
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    • When I seek rest and relief, I close my eyes and daydream about my early childhood years, which I have spendt with my family in the countryside next to the sequoia forest.
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  • 문장 5
    • Every morning was a godsend for me because I woke up late from the radiant, bright sunlight, which penetrated into my room and tickled my face.
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    • Every morning was a godsendblessing for me because I woke up late from the radiant, bright sunlight, which penetrated into my room and tickled my face.
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  • 문장 6
    • I got up jubilantly because I knew that I was going to hastily run to my parent’s bedroom and on my way there I would encounter our shaggy dog who would keep me company, jumping and envisioning coming morning walk.
      투표하세요!
    • I got up jubilantly because I knew that I was going to hastily run to my parent’s bedroom and on my way there I would encounter our shaggy dog who would keep me company, jumping and envisioning the coming morning walk.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6
  • 문장 7
    • When I met parents after a long night sleep, my dad took my hand and we would get ready for our morning stroll.
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    • When I met parents after a long night's sleep, my dad tookwould take my hand and we would get ready for our morning stroll.
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    • Huge sequoias were sturdy, they looked like a mighty wall, which took care of our peace every night, gave us a scene of safety.
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    • HThe huge sequoias were sturdy, t. They looked like a mighty wall, which took care of our peace every night, and gave us a scene of safety.
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  • 문장 11
    • While my dad and I were walking down the sequoia alley, he could put his hand on my head and gently finger my wavy baby hair.
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    • While my dad and I were walking down the sequoia alley, he could put his hand on my head andto gently finger my wavy baby hair.
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    • I felt the whole love in the Universe and I knew for sure that my dad would always protect me like those huge sequoias.
      투표하세요!
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    • We usually walk for an hour, watching our exuberant dog running in the distance with dancing long and funny ears, and mighty sequoias accompanied us.
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    • We were usually walking for an hour, watching our exuberant dog running in the distance with dancing long and funny ears, and mighty sequoias accompanied us. ¶
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