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    • Homework about a company in revenue problems

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    • It´s been some time since I last wrote something here but I thought about coming back and giving it a second try.
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    • The company Cóndores S.A. belongs to textile market since 1980.
    • It´s mission consists in textile manufacture and woven clothes adequate for every necessity, they innovate and keep high quality standards in addition they have a engage team to provide the best service.
    • While it´s true that they produce textile and clothes for all the family, their revenue has been decreasing in the last years.
    • This has taken a toll on the vision of the company of being recognized for offering comfortable clothes for all the family, expand to other countries and improve their employee training.
    • This takes us to perform a study DOFA and a problems tree about the company Cóndores to find the cause of this revenue decrease.
    • The results obtain are that the double of job positions, wage gap, production reduction, lost of direct contact with the company and the lack of potential clients are the causes of the affectation in the economics results and ultimately the profits of the company Cóndores S.A.
    • From this point we carried out and objectives tree where we propose to levelling wages, suppress night production, improve customer support, to keep both production lines and to carry out a market study.
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    • It´s been some time since I last wrote something here but I thought about coming back and giving it a second try.
      투표하세요!
    • It´s been some time since I've last wroitten something here but I thought about coming back and giving it a second try.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 2
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    • It´s mission consists in textile manufacture and woven clothes adequate for every necessity, they innovate and keep high quality standards in addition they have a engage team to provide the best service.
      투표하세요!
    • It´s mission consists inis textile manufacture and woven clothes adequate for every necessity, t. They innovate and keep high quality standards i. In addition they have a engage a team to provide the best service.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 5
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    • While it´s true that they produce textile and clothes for all the family, their revenue has been decreasing in the last years.
      투표하세요!
    • While it´ is true that they do produce textiles and clothes for all the family, their revenue has been decreasing during the lpast few years.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 6
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    • This has taken a toll on the vision of the company of being recognized for offering comfortable clothes for all the family, expand to other countries and improve their employee training.
      투표하세요!
    • This has taken a toll on the vision of the company of being recognized for offering comfortable clothes for all the family, expanding to other countries and improveing their employee training.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 7
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    • This takes us to perform a study DOFA and a problems tree about the company Cóndores to find the cause of this revenue decrease.
      투표하세요!
    • This takesresulted in us to performing a study DOFA and creating a problems tree about the company Cóndoresfor the Cóndores in order to find the cause of this revenue decrease.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 8
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    • The results obtain are that the double of job positions, wage gap, production reduction, lost of direct contact with the company and the lack of potential clients are the causes of the affectation in the economics results and ultimately the profits of the company Cóndores S.A.
      투표하세요!
    • The results obtain areis study determined that the doubleing up of job positions, wage gaps, production reduction, lost of direct contact with the company and the lack of potential clients are the causes of the affectation in the economics resultincome falls and ultimately theat of profits of the companyfor Cóndores S.A.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 9ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 9
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    • From this point we carried out and objectives tree where we propose to levelling wages, suppress night production, improve customer support, to keep both production lines and to carry out a market study.
      투표하세요!
    • From this point we carried outwe determined potential solutions and an objectives tree where we propose to levelling wages, suppress night production, improve customer support, to keep both production lines and to carry out a market study.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 10ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - 문장 10
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