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  • An epidemic of beauty sickness

    • Today my English teacher Jenny sent me a TED talk, the topic of this talk is “An epidemic of beauty sickness.” The speaker believes that nowadays women are too busy with their beauty, they worry so much about their weight and body shape, the colour of their skin, the fashion style of their clothes…They pay much more attention to these stuff other than to their family or career.
  • This is absolutely a kind of sickness.
  • I feel connected with this talk.
    • It reminds me an experience that happened two weeks ago.
    • Two weeks ago, I published a criticism in China’s most active social media about one of the most popular fashion styles in China what is the so-called “old money” style.
    • I feel sick when I open social media there are all these styles of photos.
    • So I wrote a criticism that this kind of style is toxic, it is nothing but shallow and vein.
  • It reflects people’s worship of money, which makes me feel very uncomfortable.
    • I published this on my personal social media account, I didn’t suppose this criticism would arouse such a heated argument later.
    • After several hours, when I woke up in the morning and checked my social media, it showed over 70 thousand of people had read this criticism.
    • And I received over 600 likes and over 100 comments.
    • In these comments, only 20 percent of people support my idea, the rest of the comments are all objections with strong emotions.
    • Some people are very angry and feel offended, they even call me different kinds of names.
    • The major objections have several perspectives: Firstly, I wrote “it is a pity if women only stop at the physical level, women could have gone further to go beyond these makeup stuff and to explore the wide spiritual world.” Some people think I think so only because I am already rich.
    • And why they think so is because they found my computer IP location is in the UK.
    • Actually, I came to the UK because I got a full scholarship, but I think this is my privacy and I don’t feel it is necessary to share it with these stupid people.
  • Secondly, some people point out the importance of having money.
  • They think there is nothing wrong with women having a strong desire for money since life without money can be very miserable.
    • Sometimes women don’t have much money, and they can’t change this fact in a short time, but they can dress in an ‘old money” style to pretend they are rich, which makes them feel better, which is nothing wrong.
    • About this point, I do agree that money is of course necessary for women’s independence, Virginia Woolf once said:” women need a room of their own”.
    • However, I understand someone like the “old money” style, and I’m no problem with it.
    • What makes me feel weird is this kind of fashion style has become a dominant style in society, if a style becomes dominant, if you can find this kind of style everywhere every time, people will feel there is potential pressure to follow this style, which is a big problem.
  • I didn’t finish but I am tired now.
  • I published this criticism because I really cherish women from my deep heart, I hope women can be free and just be themselves.
    • I published this with love, but I received swearing, to be honest, sometimes I do feel cold.
    • And don’t want to say anything ever again.
  • The potential pressure of being beautiful is a thing that comes from the inequality between men and women.
    • Don’t care so much about this nonsense.
  • Just be yourself.

POMÓŻ POPRAWIĆ KAŻDE ZDANIE Z OSOBNA - English

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  • Zdanie 1
    • Today my English teacher Jenny sent me a TED talk, the topic of this talk is “An epidemic of beauty sickness.” The speaker believes that nowadays women are too busy with their beauty, they worry so much about their weight and body shape, the colour of their skin, the fashion style of their clothes…They pay much more attention to these stuff other than to their family or career.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • Today my English teacher Jenny sent me a TED talk, the topic of this talk isbeing “An epidemic of beauty sickness.” The speaker believes that nowadays women are too busy with their beauty, t. They worry so much about their weight and body shape, the colour of their skin, the fashion style of their clothes…They pay much more attention to these stuff otherthings than to their family or career.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 1DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 1
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    • Two weeks ago, I published a criticism in China’s most active social media about one of the most popular fashion styles in China what is the so-called “old money” style.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • Two weeks ago, I published a criticism in China’s most active social media about one of the most popular fashion styles in China what is, the so-called “old money” style.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 5DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 5
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    • I published this on my personal social media account, I didn’t suppose this criticism would arouse such a heated argument later.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • I published this on my personal social media account, I and didn’t suppose this criticism would arouse such a heated argument later.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 9DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 9
  • Zdanie 10
    • After several hours, when I woke up in the morning and checked my social media, it showed over 70 thousand of people had read this criticism.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • After several hours, when I woke up in the morning and checked my social media, it showed over 70 thousand of people had read this my criticismal article.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 10DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 10
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    • The major objections have several perspectives: Firstly, I wrote “it is a pity if women only stop at the physical level, women could have gone further to go beyond these makeup stuff and to explore the wide spiritual world.” Some people think I think so only because I am already rich.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • The major objections have several perspectives: Firstly, I wrote “it is a pity if women only stop at the physical level, women could have gone further to go beyond these makeup stuff and to explored the wider spiritual world.” Some people think that I think so only because I am already rich.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 14DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 14
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    • Actually, I came to the UK because I got a full scholarship, but I think this is my privacy and I don’t feel it is necessary to share it with these stupid people.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • Actually, I came to the UK because I got a full scholarship, but I think this is my privacyte information and I don’t feel it is necessary to share it with these stupid people.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 16DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 16
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    • They think there is nothing wrong with women having a strong desire for money since life without money can be very miserable.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 18DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 18
  • Zdanie 19
    • Sometimes women don’t have much money, and they can’t change this fact in a short time, but they can dress in an ‘old money” style to pretend they are rich, which makes them feel better, which is nothing wrong.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • Sometimes women don’t have much money, and they can’t change this fact in a short time, b. But they can dress in an "old money” style to pretend they are rich, which makes them feel better, which is doing nothing wrong.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 19DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 19
  • Zdanie 20
    • About this point, I do agree that money is of course necessary for women’s independence, Virginia Woolf once said:” women need a room of their own”.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • About this point, I do agree that money is of course necessary for women’s independence, just as Virginia Woolf once said: women need a room of their own”.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 20DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 20
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    • What makes me feel weird is this kind of fashion style has become a dominant style in society, if a style becomes dominant, if you can find this kind of style everywhere every time, people will feel there is potential pressure to follow this style, which is a big problem.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • What makes me feel weird is that this kind of fashion style has become a dominant style in society, i. If a style becomes dominant, and if you can find this kind of style everywhere every time, then people will feelfeel that there is potential pressure to follow thissuch a style, which is a big problem.
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 22DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 22
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    • I published this criticism because I really cherish women from my deep heart, I hope women can be free and just be themselves.
      Głosuj teraz!
    • DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 24DODAJ NOWĄ KOREKTĘ! - Zdanie 24
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