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    • First, On a serious tone, the journalist describes a situation which has become more and more prevalent these last years in public places: people who watch pornography in full wiew of passers by.
    • According to the article, it seems that this phenomenom increased these last years thanks to free Wifi access that offers many public places, including cafes or restauraant and more genrally, the rise of mobile devices.
    • To illustrate this , the journalist highlights the case of men caught red handed watching sexual contents at Macdonalds.
    • Then, this situation gives rise to somes conflits and devides the public opinion, as some people want different actors, as restaurant directors or airlines companies, to react while others think it’s part individual freedom of each to watch pornography wherever they want, and if people disagree, they better “look away”, to quote the journalist words. what make the situation even more tricky is that not everyone agree on what is considered inappropriate.
    • For instance, a former justice department official think violent scene in historical movies can learn some lessons in order no to repeat yesterday’s mistakes.
    • Finally, as the article goes on, some actions are described to face the issue of pornography in public places.
    • A mouvement called Morality in Media, tried to raise airplanes companies awareness through some campaigns.
    • They responded by saying that aircraft’s staffs are trying to react depending the situation.
    • Same for Starbucks, who confirm their employees can ask people to stop watching inappropriate contents in their restaurants.
    • Yet, this issue is also playing out at individual scale.
    • A lawer interviewed said he’s trying to hide from people’s eyes, sexual or violents content when it occurs on the shows he daily watches while going to the gym.

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    • First, On a serious tone, the journalist describes a situation which has become more and more prevalent these last years in public places: people who watch pornography in full wiew of passers by.
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    • First, On a serious tone, the journalist describes a situation which has become more and more prevalent these last years in public places: people who watch pornography in full wview of passers byothers.
    • First, On a serious tonnote, the journalist describes a situation which has become more and more prevalent these last years in public places: people who watch pornography in full wview of passers -by.
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    • According to the article, it seems that this phenomenom increased these last years thanks to free Wifi access that offers many public places, including cafes or restauraant and more genrally, the rise of mobile devices.
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    • According to the article, it seems that this phenomenomn has increased these last years thanks to free Wifi access that offersover the last several years thanks to free WIFI (or WI-FI) available in many public placesettings, including cafes or restauraants, and more genrally, the risethe concomitant rise in the availability of mobile devices.
    • According to the article, it seems that this phenomenom increasedn has been increasing during these last few years thanks to free WifFi access that offersoffered in many public places, including cafes or restauraants and, more generally, the rise of mobile devices.
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    • Then, this situation gives rise to somes conflits and devides the public opinion, as some people want different actors, as restaurant directors or airlines companies, to react while others think it’s part individual freedom of each to watch pornography wherever they want, and if people disagree, they better “look away”, to quote the journalist words. what make the situation even more tricky is that not everyone agree on what is considered inappropriate.
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    • Then, thisSuch a situation gives rise to somes conflicts and deivides thesions in public opinion, asince some people want different actors, asthose in responsibility, including restaurant directors or airlines companies, to react by stopping this while others think it is part of an individual's freedom of eachoice to watch pornography wherever they want, and i. If people disagree, they bettershould “look away”, to quote the journalist words. wWhat makes the situation even more trickycomplicated is that not everyone agrees on what is considered to be inappropriate.
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    • For instance, a former justice department official think violent scene in historical movies can learn some lessons in order no to repeat yesterday’s mistakes.
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    • For instance, a former justice department official thinks that violent scenece presented in historical movies can learn someserve as lessons in order no to repeat yesterday’s mistakesnot repeating mistakes of the past.
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    • Finally, as the article goes on, some actions are described to face the issue of pornography in public places.
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    • Finally, as tThe article goes on, some actions are described to face the issue to describe other activities associated with the consumption of pornographyic material in public places.
    • Finally, as the article goes on, some actions are described to face the issue ofdescribes additional issues concerning pornography viewed in public places.
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    • A mouvement called Morality in Media, tried to raise airplanes companies awareness through some campaigns.
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    • A mouvement called Morality in Media, has tried to raiseing awareness among airplalines companies awareness through somethrough several awareness campaigns.
    • A mouvement called , "Morality in Media", triedhas been trying to raise airplawareness companies awareof this issue within airliness through some campaigns.
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    • They responded by saying that aircraft’s staffs are trying to react depending the situation.
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    • They airlines have responded by saying that aircraft’stheir staffs are trying to react depending the situationaddress the issue according to the circumstances of each case.
    • They responded by saytating that aircraft’s staffs are trystaff react according to react depending theh situation.
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    • Same for Starbucks, who confirm their employees can ask people to stop watching inappropriate contents in their restaurants.
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    • Same forLikewise at Starbucks, whoich has confirmed that their employees can ask that people to stopcease watching inappropriate contents in their restaurants.
    • Same forimilarly, Starbucks, who has confirmed that their employees can ask people to stopdesist from watching inappropriate contents in their restaurants.
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    • A lawer interviewed said he’s trying to hide from people’s eyes, sexual or violents content when it occurs on the shows he daily watches while going to the gym.
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    • A lawyer interviewed said he’s tryingies to shide from people’s eyes,eld sexual or violents content when it occurs on the shows he dailydepicted on programs he watches while going tohe is at the gym. ¶
    • A lawern interviewed saidlawyer said that he’s trying to hide from people’s eyes, sexual or violents content from people’s view when it occurs on the shows he daily watches daily while going to the gym. ¶
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