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    • a lyrical fairy-tale

  • Amande’s house was made of green leaves — not sleeves, please!
    • — green musg and sometimes sky’s tears.
    • The sky’s tears usually would come when the weather was so asleepy and usually sad or worn from the terrible world, so they — for to amande, the sky would be a girl or a boy, even the two of it — would be dabbing their watery tears from their face, the smooth clouds hiding their expression of… exhaustion, probably, and the tears always had been along the big leaf that was Amande’s roof.
    • She would, every morning, washes her face with the drop of a tear, sometimes even drinking from it — A long ago, she read that the sail of tears was good to drink.
    • She thought, instantly “I will drink it every day of my life, for i will be the stronger fairy that the world has ever seen.” And every morning she would take a cup from her room, and replace it on a tree root, waiting for the daily sky’s tear.
  • If the tear did not come, she would simply put it under the sun, to “be received to the goddess sun”, and drink it as the sky’s.
  • For her, the sun was married to the sky.
    • But and the Moon?, you would ask.
    • The lune, in the thought of the little fairy, was a hunter and a muse.
    • An alone hunter and muse.
  • If the moon had a fairy face, she would have the most wonderful freckles and eyelashes that the living world would have ever seen.
    • She didn’t know if she wanted to be lay in the moon’s back or in the smooth clouds, who looked like whispering sighs and lightly sweet in her tongue.
    • As a fairy, amande always had eaten unbearable flowers, especially the pink ones, for which she most had this affection when looking at, touching with her little pale fingertips.
    • She would say, looking, as the miracle that nature was, astonished, gathered for cloudy dreams hoversting on her vision; “Could it be real?” the thought running from her mouth.
  • “All is real, and all it is not.
  • Just look, and touch it with the hand’s soul, take it into your heart like a careful green plant, and it is yours, from you and real.
    • But if you cannot stand to the cruelness, close your eyes and pretend that it has not happened, does not exist.
    • And soon your fear will become a lost ghost.” Her mom had said it once, a long time ago when they used to stroll together, her mother grabbing the little hands of amande and waggling both while walking between gigantic trees.
    • They used to sit for a while, eating wild flowers that had been ripped from the air itself, the wind.
    • Amande loved the wind, until she discovered that it makes trees fall, therefore killing all the living substance that fairys are able to pursue, with their gentle and innofencive hands.
    • Amande didn’t know if she wanted to have tough hands, made to hold all things, made to be independent and strong, or gentle and soft hands, to hold flowers and eat them as a beautiful miracle, to never hunt but waiting for be the hunted, waiting graceful in the grass as the others girls like her, eyes closed while waiting for its destiny.
    • In a raw fair, because maybe blood was always blood.
    • Violence for you, or others, to the world or a bird or even the way you take away the food you eat from the earth; violence, still bloody and cruelness.
    • But it was utterly confusing, making everyone do a stern countenance while looking to the sky, trying to make a poor and fragil organization for that it is the world, this wilderness flood by blood of a hunted, and the claws of hunter, its raw eyes.
    • Amande was always making these stern countenances, when making her trials to understand the world, and for consequence no one understood her.
    • She was just a child trying to eat the world.
  • It was better for her to not think.
    • If you eat the meat fast, you can pretend that it is not blood in your tongue.
  • Who wants to hold all the weight of humanity?
    • Amande did not, she wanted to hold it slightly, so at least she could know a little of what she was doing.
  • The certainty that one is not cultivating hate.
    • But it was difficult, hurtful for those whom have a torturing heart beating every second.
  • She wished, a thousand of times, that she had a heart made of a mild leaf.
    • With the tender, graceful drifted essence of its own, she would not feel overwhelmed by invisible walls trying to make her lost the breath. Life breath.
    • Almost all the others kinds of the valey did not liked her, and for once a time, sometimes she was received with pebbles thrown on her face, and even insults.
    • She knew that it was just a consenquence for her alien manners; all people said it, but she would not regret being who she was.
    • A fairy trying to embrace the world with her little arms, a fairy trying to understand things and do not make her hear beat or bleed, make her try to close the eyes and go back to the earth where all living creatures should rest for eternities, until they had woken and said “I have been in a thousands of lifes and skins”

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    • The sky’s tears usually would come when the weather was so asleepy and usually sad or worn from the terrible world, so they — for to amande, the sky would be a girl or a boy, even the two of it — would be dabbing their watery tears from their face, the smooth clouds hiding their expression of… exhaustion, probably, and the tears always had been along the big leaf that was Amande’s roof.
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    • The sky’s tears usually would come when the weather was so asleepy and usually sad or worn from the terrible world, so they — for to aAmande, the sky would be a girl or a boy, even the two of it —both — and would be dabbing their watery tears from their face, the smooth clouds hiding their expression of… exhaustion, probably, and the tears always had been along the big leaf that was Amande’s roof.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 3
  • Sentence 4
    • She would, every morning, washes her face with the drop of a tear, sometimes even drinking from it — A long ago, she read that the sail of tears was good to drink.
      Vote now!
    • She would, every morning, washes her face with the drop of a tear, sometimes even drinking from it — A l. Long ago, she read that the sail of tears was good to drink.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 4
  • Sentence 5
    • She thought, instantly “I will drink it every day of my life, for i will be the stronger fairy that the world has ever seen.” And every morning she would take a cup from her room, and replace it on a tree root, waiting for the daily sky’s tear.
      Vote now!
    • She thought, instantinctively, “I will drink it every day of my life, for iI will be the strongerst fairy that the world has ever seen.” ¶
      And every morning she would take a cup from her room, and
      replace it on a tree root, waiting for the daily sky’s tear.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 5
  • Sentence 6
    • If the tear did not come, she would simply put it under the sun, to “be received to the goddess sun”, and drink it as the sky’s.
      Vote now!
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    • She didn’t know if she wanted to be lay in the moon’s back or in the smooth clouds, who looked like whispering sighs and lightly sweet in her tongue.
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    • She didn’t know if she wanted to be lay ion the moon’s back or in the smooth clouds, whoich looked like whispering sighs and lightly sweet ion her tongue.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 12ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 12
  • Sentence 13
    • As a fairy, amande always had eaten unbearable flowers, especially the pink ones, for which she most had this affection when looking at, touching with her little pale fingertips.
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    • As a fairy, aAmande always had eaten unbearable flowers, especially the pink ones, for which she had most had this affection when looking at them, touching with her little pale fingertips.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 13ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 13
  • Sentence 14
    • She would say, looking, as the miracle that nature was, astonished, gathered for cloudy dreams hoversting on her vision; “Could it be real?” the thought running from her mouth.
      Vote now!
    • She would say, looking, ast the miracle that nature was, astonished, gathered for cloudy dreams hoversting oin her vision; “Could it be real?” the thought running from her mouth.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 14ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 14
  • Sentence 15
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    • Just look, and touch it with the hand’s soul, take it into your heart like a careful green plant, and it is yours, from you and real.
      Vote now!
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  • Sentence 18
    • And soon your fear will become a lost ghost.” Her mom had said it once, a long time ago when they used to stroll together, her mother grabbing the little hands of amande and waggling both while walking between gigantic trees.
      Vote now!
    • And soon your fear will become a lost ghost.” Her mom had said it once, a long time ago when they used to stroll together, her mother grabbing the little hands of aAmande and waggling both while walking between gigantic trees.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 18ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 18
  • Sentence 19
  • Sentence 20
    • Amande loved the wind, until she discovered that it makes trees fall, therefore killing all the living substance that fairys are able to pursue, with their gentle and innofencive hands.
      Vote now!
    • Amande loved the wind, until she discovered that it makes trees fall, therefore killing all the living substance that fairyies are able to pursue, with their gentle and innoffencsive hands.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 20ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 20
  • Sentence 21
    • Amande didn’t know if she wanted to have tough hands, made to hold all things, made to be independent and strong, or gentle and soft hands, to hold flowers and eat them as a beautiful miracle, to never hunt but waiting for be the hunted, waiting graceful in the grass as the others girls like her, eyes closed while waiting for its destiny.
      Vote now!
    • Amande didn’t know if she wanted to have tough hands, made to hold all things, made to be independent and strong, or gentle and soft hands, to hold flowers and eat them as a beautiful miracle, to never hunt but waiting for be the hunted, waiting gracefully in the grass as the others girls like her, eyes closed while waiting for itstheir destiny.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 21ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 21
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    • Violence for you, or others, to the world or a bird or even the way you take away the food you eat from the earth; violence, still bloody and cruelness.
      Vote now!
    • Violence for you, or others, to the world or a bird or even the way you take away the food you eat from the eEarth; violence, still bloody and cruelness.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 23ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 23
  • Sentence 24
    • But it was utterly confusing, making everyone do a stern countenance while looking to the sky, trying to make a poor and fragil organization for that it is the world, this wilderness flood by blood of a hunted, and the claws of hunter, its raw eyes.
      Vote now!
    • But it was utterly confusing, making everyone do a stern countenance while looking to the sky, trying to make a poor and fragil organization for that it is the world, this wilderness flooded by blood of athe hunted, and the claws of a hunter, its raw eyes.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 24ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 24
  • Sentence 25
    • Amande was always making these stern countenances, when making her trials to understand the world, and for consequence no one understood her.
      Vote now!
    • Amande was always making these stern countenances, when makundergoing her trials to understand the world, and for, consequencetly, no one understood her.
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    • With the tender, graceful drifted essence of its own, she would not feel overwhelmed by invisible walls trying to make her lost the breath. Life breath.
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    • With the tender, graceful drifted essence of its own, she would not feel overwhelmed by invisible walls trying to make her lost thefor breath. LifThe breath of life.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 34ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 34
  • Sentence 35
    • Almost all the others kinds of the valey did not liked her, and for once a time, sometimes she was received with pebbles thrown on her face, and even insults.
      Vote now!
    • Almost all the others kinds of the valley did not liked her, and for once a time, sometimes, she was received with pebbles thrown on her face, and even insults.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 35ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 35
  • Sentence 36
  • Sentence 37
    • A fairy trying to embrace the world with her little arms, a fairy trying to understand things and do not make her hear beat or bleed, make her try to close the eyes and go back to the earth where all living creatures should rest for eternities, until they had woken and said “I have been in a thousands of lifes and skins”
      Vote now!
    • A fairy trying to embrace the world with her little arms, a fairy trying to understand things andthat do not make her heart beat or bleed, make her try to close ther eyes and go back to the eEarth where all living creatures should rest for eternities, until they had woken and said “I have been in a thousands of lifves and skins.
    • ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 37ADD a NEW CORRECTION! - Sentence 37