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    • I would change the position of women in my community.
    • We talk about equal rights, responsibilities, opportunities for men and women, but we are only talking.
    • I suppose that I live in a patriarchal society.
  • I am a woman and I have only two responsibilities: the home and the continuation of the family.
    • No one declares this, but I feel all these hints and reproaches.
    • Since childhood there has been one mantra in my family: ”Find a good man, marry him and everything will be fine.
    • I haven’t taken these words for a long time and go where I need to go.
    • It wouldn’t be so bad if it was only me who was being told that.
    • My girlfriends get the same thing drummed into their heads.
    • But, I convince them otherwise, and we go after our goals together.
  • Most women don’t realize their worth.
  • They don’t know all their rights.
    • But most crucially , they forget that they have a voice and their own desires, which have been deliberately hidden by society in the farthest corners of their subconscious.
  • We have a right to live our own life.
  • We have a right to the life we want for ourselves.
  • It is not a privilege.
  • It is the birthright of every human being.
    • This is the simple thought I want, and I am trying to convey to our ”modern” society.

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