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    • IELTS Writing practice

    • Information technology is changing a lot of aspects of our lives and now dominates in our house , entertainment and job activities.Information technology was a few decades ago can be used for computers and internet.
    • But now it is broad term which can imply to our phones and app on that and even in some services we use today.
    • A few decades we cant order a pizza by our phone but now we can fast and convenient.Now we can purchase a share of company using our bank account and app , in the past it probably require you to go the stock market and meet up with broker.And also how quickly you are able to buy any ticket in the past it will you need to wait a long queue. and how our car even is changing because of IT.
    • Some car have system that called parktronik which assist when you park.
    • There is also internal computer that have GPS on that which helps do not get lost.You are able to download even app on that.
    • Also you can subscribe on Netflix and watch your movies and soap operas literally everywhere.And now It is easy to connect with different people all over the world by utilizing social media.Despite of fascinating qualities that I mentioned IT techonology have their disadvantages.
    • Number one trash contents or trash information it is literally all over internet that makes feel disturbing.
    • For Example did you see content for kids in YOUTUBE they dont have any educational purposes.Or some of content that makes by science popular Youtuber that against science that convince people to believe in fictional stuff.
    • And number second did you remember I said it is easy to connect with people guess what not all the people are good to communicate just like in real world if you are lucky you will just meet some troller you probably forget or you will meet a people you probably regret that you get acquitance with them.And number three IT technology can be addictive phone and gaming can be serious burden to any people to succeed at any field they wanted.
    • To conclude, Inspite of These serious issues I do believe IT is technology can elevate our society to new level greatness.
    • THANK You for people who will correct and say your opinion how many score I will get with this essay

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